Hey guys, here is a techno-pop ballad I wrote a while ago. It has some beautiful melodies but I dont have the recourses to record something. Lmk what you think

Dear, My Unknown Lover

[Chorus1]
Could any bone break prove my love
I‘ll be jumping down
Top of Burj Khalifa
Falling for so long
Knowing no one comes
I‘m bracing for impact

[Verse 1]
Dear my unknown lover,
I wrote you this heartfelt letter
Knowing it‘s time for me to grow
Open my heart to strangers laws
I‘ve been up for a minute
Looking for someone to commit with
To show me real love, I would give in
If only you were here right now

[Pre-Chorus]
I put you up
Into the sky
So you could be there from day to night
You‘re the stars and sunshine
Always want to have you in sight

[Chorus1]
[Chorus2]
I want a love so diamond rich
Or just a little taste
Of what I never get
Need someone to hold
Knowing no one comes
I‘m holding my own hand

[Verse 2]
Dear My Unknown Lover
Can‘t you leave my dreams when I want ya?
I‘d hand you my heart I wrapped in gold
Would give you my all then even more
I‘ve been up for a minute
Getting lost between strangers bedding
Not finding any love, my destiny
Why cant you prove me wrong right now?

[Pre-Chorus]
…
I will always be there in sight
Chorus
[Chorus1]
[Chorus2]

[Outro]
What the fuck love, give me just a little
Never had a piece of what could be heaven
Show me what is love, give me just a little
When I look at you, oh could that be heaven
2x

This is a great track. I may have said this before, but I hear a similarity to Syd Barrett. This is more disciplined than his stuff back way, but it has that same kinda quality. I love it.

lol
yes you've made reference to him before
I looked him up back then
I had to look him up again
Said to be "the soul" of pink floyd
He's certainly trippy, I like his playfulness, we often lose that as we age, it gets "serious"
the very few times I've taken psychedelics I put lots of thought into preparations
I don't take things so lightly but seem give off the opposite impression.

glad you like the song Chris!!

Hi

Thanks @Elvis Nash  @rightly  @pompeyjazz @popitup @moraamarolaloba @Cazrolina @ChrisPrice

Thank you so much for listening & your comments are encouraging
currently i am working on a ambient song & trying to get it ultra smooth

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This track really hit me as soon as it kicked in. The vocal is fabulous - I wish had that kinda range. I like the gritty rock backing too. I absolutely love this. It's modern, but it has some great rock n roll roots too. I doubt that I'll hear anything better than this tonight!

Sounds good to me. Not really my genre but everything fits as it should. it has an 80's feel to it. Nothing wrong with that. I enjoyed this