Thanks for all the feedback guys. Glad you can see something of worth in it
We are in the process of making a bit of time to re-work this one. Looking at addressing the fact that the pre is catchier than the chorus. We're also toying with the idea of tweaking the lyrics to make it a bubblegum boy band number in light of the feeling from several posters that it works well with male vocals as it is.
Who knows what we'll end up with but I'm sure we'll get plenty of feedback on the completed song