Christ that's retro. Good stuff. Great voice.
Only one thing, the lyric could be crafted on a little more, only in my opinion.
Hi Caleb....thanks for stopping by for a listen, and by commenting ![Grin ;D](http://songwriterforum.co.uk/Smileys/default/grin.gif)
I would like to ask you, however, as to what you mean by this being retro? Could you please explain what this is being compared to ![Smiley :)](http://songwriterforum.co.uk/Smileys/default/smiley.gif)
And what do you mean by your wish that this lyric be "crafted on a little more"? On a little more what ![Huh ???](http://songwriterforum.co.uk/Smileys/default/huh.gif)
I'm sure you have some answers, and I'm looking forward to hearing more ![Grin ;D](http://songwriterforum.co.uk/Smileys/default/grin.gif)
Thanks, again....
Tom don't take offense. My retro comment was a compliment, thought the instrumentation was early 70's singer songwritier-esque and in a world where Adele, Rhianna and Mumford and Sons are all huge I don't see there being a limit or a certain mold we need to choose to present our music as long as it's done from the heart, people will buy into it.
Lyric wise my opinion is simple, I thought the use of the word desire in too different contexts in two different sections was a little clunky that's all.
Hey there Caleb......no offense taken. I just wanted some clarity.
Retro....ok...70's....cool!
Clunky....ok......everything I write is clunky
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Where would I be, if not clunky
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.......oh, ya, rich & famous
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Thanks Caleb for answering.
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-Tom