[Nellie]

Hi guys! This is about those kind of relationships that are not good for you, but you end up coming back because of that lingering feeling that something might change. Your comments and suggestions are always welcomed! Thank you for reading.

OBLIVIOUS

For tonight
Could you erase my memory
So we could fall again
And love each other endlessly

Without secrets
Falling into deep ends
Of misery and apology
Do you wanna start again

Your eyes are mesmerizing
And your hands are touching mine
But without any feeling
Should this be our healing
Or are we falling apart
   
Tonight tonight
Your eyes your eyes
Stole my heart
Again

For tomorrow
Could we start anew
And you'll be here all night
I'll be right next to you

Without regrets
Spinning all our secrets
And laziness or psychology
Is keeping away your honesty

Your eyes are mesmerizing
And your hands are touching mine
But without any feeling
Should this be our healing
Or are we falling apart

Tonight tonight
Your eyes your eyes
Stole my heart
Once more

Light, life, hope was once your policy
But then you came next to me
And nothing mattered
You held me in your arms
Both wrapped up in love
Oblivious

Tonight tonight
Your eyes your eyes
Stole my heart
Again

Tonight tonight
Your eyes your eyes
Stole my heart
Again

Your eyes are mesmerizing
And your hands are touching mine
But without any feeling
Should this be our healing
Or are we falling apart

Aren't we falling apart
Tonight tonight
Are we falling in love
You stole my heart
Again

[JakePage]

Hey Nellie, really like this, would make a good pop song, very catchy chorus  but my only thing to cahamge would be to maybe repeat the chorus twice every time, just seems a bit short for a chorus.

Nice job, Jake

[Paulski]

Some really good lines in there such as:

Falling into deep ends
Of misery and apology

and

For tomorrow
Could we start anew

As far as suggs I didn't like the word "psychology" or the phrase "hope was once your policy" in there - seemed out of place. The five-line (pre-chorus?) might be difficult to set to music. And the title appears too late in the song IMO. Feel free to ignore me though!
Paul

[benjo]

 hey nellie

 this is a really nice write you have some good feed back above
 
 but from me i think its a real nice thought provoking lyric
 it just kept me reading right through
 i enjoyed the chorus but do agree it might need to be sung twice
 but that's not a prob

 really good job hope i hear this with the music it deserves

                    tony...

[Nellie]

JakePage – Oh, wow thanks so much for your nice words! I imagined all of this to be the chorus but now I'm thinking that the first one could be a prechorus? If it were like that, I would repeat the chorus twice (thanks to your advice) so thank you for amazing sugg! I'm unsure if the first one would be better as a prechorus or a part of the chorus so any advice would be helpful!
''Your eyes are mesmerizing
And your hands are touching mine
But without any feeling
Should this be our healing
Or are we falling apart

Tonight tonight
Your eyes your eyes
Stole my heart
Once more''
Thank you Jake for reading and taking the time to comment, I appreciate it greatly!

Paulski – Hii! Thank you for sharing your opinion and reading this! I appreciate every comment and it's good to see what can be improved. I'll think about changing it, but for now it works fine for me (however, I appreciate your advice). Thank you for your kind review, I respect your opinion!

Benjo – Hiii! That's too kind! Thank you for saying that and nice review! It put a huge smile on my face today.

To everyone who commented, two words: endless thanks. Thank you guys for reviewing this and sharing your thoughts!