I don't understand the story of the lyric, but I do think I get the feeling or emotion of it. There's one error that should be fixed: The line "I guess you must of heard the things...." (first line of verse 2) should be "I guess you must
have heard the things...." You can determine which word to use by using the verb phrase in a different sentence. "I have
heard that somewhere." You wouldn't say "I of heard that somewhere."
I really like the way your words and melody go together, so smooth and flowy. I like the beat, good for dancing. And the production (not that I'm qualified to judge), sounds awesome to me. I think the singing is great, too. What everybody else said....
Vicki