Hi there:
I love the hook in the chorus, I like the arrangement, lyrics are clever too, I am probably going to to sound dumb here but what does the lyric "the sun always follows the moon" actually mean? What is this song about? Because what I gathered is that it's about growing up? Is that right? And who is "him"?
Sorry to be nit picky, I love the chorus the hook is great as I've said, but I am just offering my perspective I guess.
Kind Regards
Diane