[stickboymusic]

Here's one that I finally managed to record properly

Oh you always said that we would go
to the place beneath the snow capped mountains
Hey we always knew there'd come a day
when we both could run away forever

Oh oh oh you were there for me
Oh oh oh I'll be here for you
Oh oh oh you were there for me
On the other side of blue

Oh we could see the river flow
by a fire and watch the glowing embers
Hey we could watch the ravens play
in the forest as it sways in silence

Oh oh oh you were there for me
Oh oh oh I'll be here for you
Oh oh oh you were there for me
On the other side of blue

I know this could be the best day of my life
The stars will alight when you and I collide
Send shockwaves through the earth and illuminate the sky

oh oh

Oh oh oh you were there for me
Oh oh oh I'll be here for you
Oh oh oh you were there for me
On the other side of blue

On the other side
On the other side of blue

[nooms]

hi stickboy
enjoyed this a lot, sweet song, simple and charming
nice calm recording, great tone in your vocal,  stands out

thought you extended the last chorus just a little too much maybe
the words are a little safe but guess thats what your saying in the song ...
even that criticism is too much because thoroughly enjoyed it
fine work
all the best, nooms

[stickboymusic]

hi stickboy
enjoyed this a lot, sweet song, simple and charming
nice calm recording, great tone in your vocal,  stands out

thought you extended the last chorus just a little too much maybe
the words are a little safe but guess thats what your saying in the song ...
even that criticism is too much because thoroughly enjoyed it
fine work
all the best, nooms

Thanks noonms.... yeh i did try cutting one of those repeats but it then felt missing to me.... maybe i should have left it cut

[nooms]

an alternative course would be to make a feature of it, that extended ending and turn it into a lift.. a 'swell'
dont mean a fuzz box and welsh voice choir but maybe just an extra harmony, would justify its length
i remember an old album title from way back.. 'flaunt the imperfection'
whatever you do or dont do, its a lovely track..
nooms

[Schavuitje]

Thoroughly enjoyed this Very, very nice song.

I loved the production, although the guitar seemed to be dropped a little too soon and a little too much in the mix
whenever the vocals came in.
I really liked the guitar picking and sound and those vocals and harmonies were fab.
I agree with nooms about the end and I'd do exaclty what he said with it. Don't get rid of it. Build on it.
This is what I hear. Another voice, yours, but sounding much more distant from the mike - as if your on the other side of blue
This 2nd voice sings the same line but not in sync with the first and not in harmony but an octave above.
But that's just an idea

[James Nighthawk]

Yup, there is something odd about the levelling on the electric guitar just before the vocals come in for each section..

Lyrically very safe and unoriginal. I did however like the line:

Hey we could watch the ravens play
in the forest as it sways in silence

This line has more poetry than the rest of the song altogether. It stands out as it is descriptive and unique. 

You have a lovely voice and are a solid guitar player, and you are consistently enjoyable to listen to. I worry however that I have heard three songs posted so far and already a "sameyness" is emerging. There is a fine line between having a sound that is your own and sounding "samey". And that line is different to every listener, naturally.

With this style of music lyrics are everything for a lot of listeners, so personally I would recommend focusing on those going forward, as you have performance and structure down my friend!

Thanks for sharing 

[stickboymusic]

When you both say the guitar level drop, do you mean the guitar in the intro goes quieter when the vocals come in?

I see mention of electric guitar so im a little confused as to which bit

Just for clarity... the intro and main guitar is just an acoustic and I havent dropped or altered the level of it at any part in the song.... odd

[stickboymusic]

however that I have heard three songs posted so far and already a "sameyness" is emerging. There is a fine line between having a sound that is your own and sounding "samey". And that line is different to every listener, naturally.

I have 128 songs on the soundcloud if you want to hear some variety. http://soundcloud.com/stickboy

I've just started working towards a new collection of songs called "library songs" so I want them to all have a similar vibe and not be too loud , if you get me.

[Songsmith]

Really enjoyed this, lovely, well played & nice vocals too, you could do a lot to this but there is always the danger of *ucking it up if you fiddled too much with it. It is quite delicate & I feel if you want to do anything with it then it needs to be treated as such, I kinda like it just as it is, smashing 

[domj]

Beautiful song... thought i had commented because i have listened to this a few times before. It's a very neat song.

[mihkay]

Melodically gorgeous. Unusual but not not too far out. Very engaging.
 

[Schavuitje]

Hiya just listened again Really nice vocals!
There is definately a mixing issue there though. I hear it again this time just as
clearly. At the beginning the guitar sounds like it has a lot of treble and then a couple of seconds
before the vocals come in the guitar drops in volume and sounds much bassier.
I'm not sure what's causing it if you haven't manually altered the guitar. Obviosuly sometimes you want the guitar to drop
back a little when the vocals come in so that's what I thought you'd overdone. But if you didn't
maybe James could give you an idea of what could be causing that. I actually think you might be playing it like that and automatically
dropping before the vocals come in.
Not sure to be honest haha Love the song That bit just doesn't sound right though. And judging by the great production on this I thought
I wasn't being too nit-picky

[James Nighthawk]

Yes, Schav, I can;t tell if it is played like that, or if the file has been tweaked in mixing when the vocals enter, but it is very jarring to my producers ear 

[stickboymusic]

Hiya just listened again Really nice vocals!
There is definately a mixing issue there though. I hear it again this time just as
clearly. At the beginning the guitar sounds like it has a lot of treble and then a couple of seconds
before the vocals come in the guitar drops in volume and sounds much bassier.
I'm not sure what's causing it if you haven't manually altered the guitar. Obviosuly sometimes you want the guitar to drop
back a little when the vocals come in so that's what I thought you'd overdone. But if you didn't
maybe James could give you an idea of what could be causing that. I actually think you might be playing it like that and automatically
dropping before the vocals come in.
Not sure to be honest haha Love the song That bit just doesn't sound right though. And judging by the great production on this I thought
I wasn't being too nit-picky

Ok i  am guessing you mean literally the last few notes before the vox come in?

If so , its not a mix thing, i purposefully played it lighter (into a kind of fade) before the vocals start

if you dont mean that bit.... then im at a loss ha!

[cheff daniel]

great songwriting.



gr. Dan