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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: TSOTS on January 05, 2021, 06:25:10 AM
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Hi All,
I'm new to the forum and just wanted to see what y'all thought of me and my friend's new song. It's called Starchaser. We hope you like it! I am the singer/songwriter/guitarist/bassist and my friend plays drums, we both mix on Reaper, Ableton, and sometimes Logic.
https://soundcloud.com/thestoryofthesun/starchaser (https://soundcloud.com/thestoryofthesun/starchaser)
Here are the lyrics:
I’m beginning to think that I love her, love her
I’m beginning to think that she’s the one
Then she sees celebrities
Starchaser
She don’t love me, she don’t love me, she don’t love me
Starchaser
She don’t love me, she don’t love me, she don’t love me
And just like that, I’ve been replaced,
I hate her guts but I love her face.
Starchaser
She don’t love me, she don’t love me, she don’t love me
I’m beginning to think that I’m a loser, loser
I’m beginning to think that I’m no good
Then she sees celebrities
Chorus2
Steady on, turn me on,
Steady on, turn me on
Starchaser won’t you let me know,
Starchaser let me go
Yeah
Chorus 3
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Hi Guys, and welcome. Definitely a catchy power pop/punk/rock number, I really like it. The AM Radio vocal section (good description? you know where I mean :D) is great.
My only thing is that I'd probably like a little more light and shade but overall, really good!
Pete
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very
skater rock
I really enjoyed the listen
not my thing usually
I liked the arrangement
Good work!
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Some good elements. If I'm being honest (and no point blowing smoke) it just needs to be a bit tighter and crisper and your vocals are a bit pitchy but in some parts sound over pitch corrected. Love the drum sound and I love the little synthy frills before the second verse. The break is good as well. Lots to be proud of just needs a bit of finesse to take it to the next level
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Hi, if you are going for the sound that you hear from American bands on MTV Kerrang, you've nailed it, If not........ ;). Not really my thing, but I enjoyed it, the guitars and rums sounded good, the vocal could do with a bit of tidying up.
Good stuff!
Jamie
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Hola @TSOTS (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22744)
encantada de conocerte.
The style of the song is full of styles, a fusion that is very well connected, actual and from before, and the treatment of the voices is great.
I think it is a very good product.
Maybe I would add a little more volume to the bass (my personal taste, nothing more)
Bienvenido al Club
Mora
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Thank you so much! Yes I agree the bass was too low. We've increased the bass and we're actually probably going to add some more sub-bass to the kick. Thanks so much for listening!
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Hello, catchy and efficient song. Good Stuff :)
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Enjoyed this one a lot. Nice and tight, does what it says on the tin. Great energy, playing and vocals and a great hooky chorus
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@TSOTS (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22744) nice slice of power pop👍 It’s catchy and there’s some good hooks and some nice touches throughout, I really like the couplet ‘ And just like that, I’ve been replaced,
I hate her guts but I love her face.’ you nailed it there!👌
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Hi and welcome,
Good energy and like the sound you've got, modern pop/rock, with catchy chorus.
A few twists and turns to keep interest on the way. through too.
Sounding confident, imagine it would be good live.
Thanks for sharing
:-)
Neil
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Fun and energetic! Love the chorus, really catchy and singalong.
I'd bring the "Then she sees celebrities" up a bit - it's a key line and gets a bit lost.
I think there is a slight "jerkiness" to some of the sections and transitions. For example, after the chorus you could use a bar of respite and then crash into the next verse with even more impact.
But I love a bit of harmonic skate punk and can't wait to hear more.