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jim morrison
Platinum Album
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Joes Place
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August 06, 2011, 09:59:33 PM »
http://soundcloud.com/sunset-music-productions/joes-place
Lyrics
Sitting on a rock and
looking over the hill
taking my recovery seriously
its a bitter pill
taking a walk to joes house
hes got something to show me
i'm not sure if i want to go in there
not with this fear burning freely
making plans to put him in a hole
we go through our decision
i've made this mask to
hide away with precision
jo cuts his brakes off
i cut him down
we've planned this for months now
the times come around x3
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cheff daniel
Solo Gig
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Re: Joes Place
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August 07, 2011, 11:42:25 AM »
i like the lyrics in this blueslike song a lot. bass and drums sounds good now but your guitar is out of tune, watch your bends. there is some great vibes in this song though.
gr. Dan
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jim morrison
Platinum Album
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Re: Joes Place
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August 07, 2011, 11:55:40 AM »
will do, thanks Dan
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dinnerwithgreedo
Platinum Album
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Re: Joes Place
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August 07, 2011, 01:19:01 PM »
Ok.... love this. I sent you one change i'd make via SoundCloud. Hope you don't mind
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postmn
Solo Gig
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I am not done listening to myself
Re: Joes Place
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August 07, 2011, 03:51:54 PM »
nice! loving the blues feel, intro is a bit too long for me but thts me, keep em comin:)
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Kafla
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Re: Joes Place
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Reply #5 on:
August 08, 2011, 05:53:06 PM »
Brilliant lyrics, great story
It's a great all round effort
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Dutchbeat
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Re: Joes Place
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Reply #6 on:
August 09, 2011, 06:41:20 PM »
Great singing!
yes, very laid back, but the noise is a bit much, but I think you know that
your voice is cool!!!
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