[dinnerwithgreedo]

Short song for the ex Mrs (who'll never hear it)

http://snd.sc/pT2rbD

[Kafla]

This is beautiful, my favourite if hours so far

I love the lyrics and guitar playing

Just one suggestion , the little mid 8 part where you have no lyric would be nice with a lyric , something simple like " I miss you"

I hope you dont mind me saying this

This is a really cool, sad melancholic song

[dinnerwithgreedo]

Just one suggestion , the little mid 8 part where you have no lyric would be nice with a lyric , something simple like " I miss you"

I hope you dont mind me saying this

I don't mind at all. Lyrics will be written for that part but i've not figured out what I want to say yet.

[Kafla]

One other thing DWG

I notice you recorded this on the iPhone

There is a great little programme called Vocal Live, you can buy a 4 track within the app for £2.99  - it's brilliant for simple 4 track arrangements

I have just bought the mic for my iPad to hopefully improve the vocals on my songs

[dinnerwithgreedo]

One other thing DWG

I notice you recorded this on the iPhone

There is a great little programme called Vocal Live, you can buy a 4 track within the app for £2.99  - it's brilliant for simple 4 track arrangements

I have just bought the mic for my iPad to hopefully improve the vocals on my songs

Thanks for the tip but when i record it properly it'll be done on a PC. I just used the SoundCloud app for this which has a simple 'record and upload' function included.

[jim morrison]

Really good song, it's always the same - the best songs are the ones that come from the heart, well done mate!

[spacedogg]

Excellent songwriting as usual Paul. I think your ear for a good tune is pointier than either of Mr Spock's. Keep it coming dude.

[cheff daniel]

lovely song, simple and direct. i hear a cello to it but thats not even necessary. its just beautifull the way it is.

gr.  Dan 

[thedaytonariots]

Good stuff. My suggestion, when you record it properly keep it stripped right back as it is now. It'll lose what it has if you add in percussion, bass and more guitars.

[postmn]

to me, it just needs a touch up and is finished, amazing guitar,amazing song

[dinnerwithgreedo]

Thanks for the reviews everyone!!!!!

[Shaktyone]

very nice - and touching - lovely guitar work and floating voice along witht the melody

[dinnerwithgreedo]

very nice - and touching - lovely guitar work and floating voice along witht the melody

I've posted a more recent demo. Check it out and see if you still like it.

[Shaktyone]

Demo 2

Yes like a lot like how you have kept the lyrics simple and similar but changed them the second time around to help to tell the story - obviously this is more easy when its from the heart.
My songs tend to be from the heart experience related and or what I've observed.
And I like the chorus

[MinuteSekunde]

I really like  the music personally, I think it just has such an 'emotional' feeling to it, also I kinda feel that the lyrics match it beautifully! You've done a great job! Well done!