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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: WhOoSh on October 25, 2012, 07:26:21 PM

Title: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: WhOoSh on October 25, 2012, 07:26:21 PM: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zl2eFQ7UdZ0 (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zl2eFQ7UdZ0)

Get down on the floor
Your begging for more
And it's time to go

Leave it to chance
You can't wait for a dance
Get on that floor

There playing your song
You've got to catch on
Youre on fire

Youre in love with that girl
Your feeling so swell
And doing so well

Don't tell the world
They will all want a piece
Hold onto your girl

Rock - Rock - Rock

Kiss her all day
Love her all night

Now is the time to rock her
Out of sight
Now is the time to
Rock through the night.
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: Ramshackles on October 25, 2012, 08:58:44 PM: One of the strangest songs I heard today !!
Who is delivering the vocal? Sounds like a news reader...

Fairly short, not exactly a complete song I'd say...
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: nooms on October 25, 2012, 11:44:26 PM: not sure what to make of this whoosh..seems to been built from bits of 'lets dance', with the lady from the post office on vocals ..look forward to the next instalment
welcome to the forum
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: WhOoSh on October 26, 2012, 07:08:53 PM: Thanks . Got more in store ;)
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: Nick Bauer on October 26, 2012, 07:26:18 PM: haha thats brilliant. not much more to say really. love it.
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: S.T.C on October 26, 2012, 08:03:18 PM: Short and mad...hope theres not more. ;D
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: seriousfun on October 26, 2012, 09:36:20 PM: I've gotta say that was not what I expected. Initially I thought I had the wrong link. Definitely a lot of energy in this short number. Where the vocals vocaloid? or some other synthetic voice? Weird effect and in some ways quite endearing as a one off. Instrumentation was good, obviously relying heavily on the beat and the riff base but well captured.
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: RichyRowlatt on October 26, 2012, 09:40:08 PM: Utter brilliance. Love it.
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: james bond 007 on October 26, 2012, 10:41:51 PM: 1 song per week is the way M likes it...you havent read the forum rules!
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: Binladeda on October 26, 2012, 10:49:41 PM: ;D ;D...this made me smile..so you get a big thumbs up from me mate.....No criticism or advice needed, it is what it is. A fertile/creative imagination at work here I think ;D Looking forward to hearing more.. Good work and a big Welcome ;D
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: mihkay on October 26, 2012, 11:08:33 PM: If this was an advert for a Camera or a Soft Drink inn the 1990's I would not be surprised. ;)
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: WhOoSh on October 27, 2012, 04:54:42 AM: Big shout guys. I got tons of these kinda songs knocking about. They just want to say.

" Hey , Is this love. Is this love ?"

They just built that way. Songs got needs you know :D
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: digger72 on October 27, 2012, 10:00:41 AM: Hi,

The first part reminds me of Union of the Snake by Duran Duran. The rest, including the video? Different. And that's not a bad thing.

Digger
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: Dutchbeat on October 27, 2012, 12:05:54 PM: welcome to thé forum, Whoosh,
cool and bizarre!

i would love to hear and see more!
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: montydog on October 28, 2012, 01:55:24 PM: Totally, utterly mad mad mad. It's original, interesting and full of ideas and short. Erm......I don't know what more to say.
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: WhOoSh on October 28, 2012, 07:34:08 PM: Quote from: montydog on October 28, 2012, 01:55:24 PM
Totally, utterly mad mad mad. It's original, interesting and full of ideas and short. Erm......I don't know what more to say.
Ty :) Got a whole heap more stacking up !
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: James Nighthawk on October 28, 2012, 11:13:15 PM: Odd. Strange. Somewhat compelling if primarily through intrigue.

I'd say welcome to the madhouse, but it appears you already reside there ;D ;) ;D
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: WhOoSh on October 29, 2012, 10:46:50 AM: Quote from: James Nighthawk on October 28, 2012, 11:13:15 PM
Odd. Strange. Somewhat compelling if primarily through intrigue.

I'd say welcome to the madhouse, but it appears you already reside there ;D ;) ;D
Yes you have the gist of it :P Thanks for the great fun comments :)
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: flossie on October 29, 2012, 08:36:09 PM: Well now you've got noticed let's hear what else you've got you crazy man!!! ;D
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: misswhiterabbit on October 30, 2012, 07:05:40 PM: Curiouser and Curiouser.. Agree with flossie. Bring it on!
Title: Re: Your Begging For More | Short song without a Chorus
Post by: man of simple pleasures on October 31, 2012, 07:15:43 PM: haha crazy video with the kid like, ya get all kinds on here like! crackers!