Wrote this verse, thought I'd contribute to the forum by showing it to you.

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Hooded Singer

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« on: August 15, 2016, 09:18:01 PM »
As self-esteem lies comatose
And lover’s dream is imagination
I am still here
And only my demons’ infatuation




Would like to write a song around it when the feeling strikes.

Paulski

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« Reply #1 on: August 16, 2016, 01:46:34 AM »
I don't get your comment.
How are you contributing to the forum by posting this?
You would be benefiting from the forum by others reading and possibly commenting on it.
But your comment implies you don't want feedback and we are to stand back in awe :)
Or maybe I'm reading things wrong...
Paul

Helena4

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« Reply #2 on: August 16, 2016, 10:40:56 AM »
I think you should finish it.

"I only write when inspiration strikes. Fortunately, it strikes every morning at 9 o'clock sharp" - Somerset Maugham
In her kiss, I taste the revolution...
I am a rebel girl.

PaulAds

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« Reply #3 on: August 16, 2016, 12:22:02 PM »
I think you should finish it.

"I only write when inspiration strikes. Fortunately, it strikes every morning at 9 o'clock sharp" - Somerset Maugham

I agree...get stuck in  :)

And what a great quote that is...
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