Hello everyone , I would appreciate feedback and maybe little help with instrumental part of my song which is called Dead Stairs in Gran Canaria and is talking about how i almost killed myself in that stair
So here is SoundCloud
https://soundcloud.com/patriciomusica/demo/s-FnjycLyrics:
It's a my little story
And it was only mine
But I wanna to share it
With you, with my guys
Let's say John
That is how I will name him
Is going down the stairs
On his little trip
Suddenly he flied, two meters down
On wet stair he should choose another one
He didn't hurt himself
He just hurt his ego
Cause there was plenty of people
Looking at him
Why he didn't listen to old man
Who said that don't step on the wet stair
It's my little story
And it was only mine
but I wanna to share it
With you, with my guys
His mobile device looked like cobweb
In three pieces, hardware cover, battery
Covered by scars And John couldn't deny
That his phone won't took photo of another sunset
It's a my little story
And it was only mine
But I wanna to share it
With you, with my guys
But wait for the most sad thing
About this little trip
When he looked at his notebook
With all his songs in it
It was low down, low down
Not on ground but in the water
Low down, slow down
And ask someone to help to gather it
Some random guy helped him
God bless to random guys
Which doing random good thinks
To random people that are falling from stairs
(Solo)
It's a little bit funny
It's a little bit sad
That John was me
Is fact that I can't deny