Hi, these are some lyrics I've been working on for a while, there are chords to go with it, I also still have an outro to write.
Could you give me some constructive critizism? Maybe rate it out of ten?It wud help alot
the clock ticks, as they talk,
the grass flicks, where they walk,
time passes, they start to run,
as rain slashes, below the sun,
they run to, an old broken roof,
she smiles at him, he can barely move,
she looks at him, into his eyes,
he tries to hide, the feelings that rise,
because he knows,
shes not after him,she wants someone else,
they wont ever be, anything else,
so he tears away his eyes, traps his feelings deep inside,
where they will hide, always hide,
they sit and talk, rain pouring down,
rain pits and patters, a soothing sound,
minutes like seconds, hours like minutes,
Like in heaven, time feels infinite,
But now, they've got to go,
its too dark, getting too cold,
when she, looks into his eyes,
Things inside her, try to hide,
Because she know's
He's not after her, he wants someone else,
They won't ever be, anything else,
So she tries not to cry, when he tears away his eyes,
Two tears mix and hide, with the rain outside,
Thanks for reading
