[WULFE]

Hey, I guess this is the first song i'm going to show you guys! I just want a little CC, feedback, maybe a helping hand in my songwriting skills seeing as i'm just starting out...

This is only the  first draft, I'm going to tweak it a bit, probably add a little more on to it, just see where it goes...

https://soundcloud.com/triskele-the-strange/the-little-things-unfinished/s-fH7rU

Anyway, here are the lyrics:

Washing over me, the midnight blue
Standing oh so high, it seeps right through

Drown myself in this cigarette smoke,
It flies right over, and dissipates,

I savour all the little things before they fade...
They won't stay, they won't stay...

They come and go sometimes
Sights and sounds sweep by

I see the light, and it grows brighter now
and fades to grey

And everything is morphing, changing, drifting out of reach
Everything is changing, morphing, drifting out of reach

And I remember smoking cigarettes
on a summer's night

It's just the little things we ignore
'til we want more

And everything is changing, morphing, drifting out of reach
Everything is changing, morphing, drifting out of reach

Washing over me, the midnight blue
Standing oh so high, it seeps right through

And everything is changing, morphing, drifting out of reach
Everything is changing, morphing, drifting out of reach

[dnafe]

I'd really Like to hear where you go with this...some really cool musical themes and instrumentation.

A little unfocused in that respect but as you say it's a draft I'll let you do your thing to it.

My only real comment would be to get the full band instrumentation in as soon as possible as the song is so much more interesting when they arrive on the scene...they keep you interested in the song.

I think if you do that you'll find that focus I mentioned earlier then anything is possible

Cool first offering

(wish they had a thumbs up emoticon)

just my $0.02 CAD