The Songwriter Forum - songwriting reviews, tips and chat
Songwriter Forum => Lyrics => Topic started by: Jackdaw on May 19, 2017, 01:23:22 PM
-
God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?
I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!
My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
All its Times n all its Dates
But I PAINT things my own way
I am the Hand of Fate
As I DREW for Nostradamus
King Henry died by eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is on the nigh.
Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.
My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
All its Times n all its Dates
But I PAINT things my own way
I am the Hand of Fate
As I wined and dined Rasputin
He was killed by a guest's gun
DEPICTED as the Mad Monk
His 'Habits' became his undone
I have sailed with Chris Columbus
And discovered the New Lands
I PENNED all maps and charts
You now have in your hands.
Your memories n histories
Will one day fade away
Your colours of life
In BLACK and WHITE
Will turn a shade of GREY.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
This needs more work me thinks :-)
-
Its all about progression ;) But it's still a great read
-
Its all about progression ;) But it's still a great read
Cheers matey!!!
Take care
And ...
It's nice to know that not all peeps on here are so bias as to what lyrics or who they like?
Ps...
Some of my words and rhyme will be published within a famed Magazine.
The date being June the 6th.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
THE COLOURS OF LIFE
God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?
I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!
The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.
My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate
As I DREW for Nostradamus
Dear Henry lost an eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is surely nigh.
Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.
The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.
My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in Your dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
I like this but the flow is just not there yet "Dear Henry lost an eye" can you explain more thanks.
So far really good write Jack, welcome to the forum of lyric writers.
-
THE COLOURS OF LIFE
God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?
I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!
The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.
My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate
As I DREW for Nostradamus
Dear Henry lost an eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is surely nigh.
Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.
The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.
My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in Your dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
I like this but the flow is just not there yet "Dear Henry lost an eye" can you explain more thanks.
So far really good write Jack, welcome to the forum of lyric writers.
Many thanks for your kind welcome.
Nostradamus warned King Henry11 re his fate and impending death.
He told him not to joust.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Will edit to KING rather than DEAR
-
THE COLOURS OF LIFE
God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?
I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!
The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.
My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate
As I DREW for Nostradamus
King Henry lost an eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is surely nigh.
Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.
The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.
My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in Your dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Hi Jackdaw,
So very different but so interesting to read. Poetic and historical. I would have preferred to have noticed all the artistic references without them being obvious in Capitals but that is just my way of thinking. More artistic to leave it to the reader, perhaps?
I wonder what style you have in mind for the music?
Very enjoyable and thought-provoking. Like it so thankyou ...
Marrianna :-)
-
To Oldbutyet
As for Kings of Lyrics?
I myself could never compete with the likes of. . . Bob Dylan, Al Stewart or an enigma called Nick Drake?
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
THE COLOURS OF LIFE
God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?
I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!
The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.
My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate
As I DREW for Nostradamus
Dear Henry lost an eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is surely nigh.
Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.
The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.
My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in Your dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
I like this but the flow is just not there yet "Dear Henry lost an eye" can you explain more thanks.
So far really good write Jack, welcome to the forum of lyric writers.
Many thanks for your kind welcome.
Nostradamus warned King Henry11 re his fate and impending death.
He told him not to joust.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Will edit to KING rather than DEAR
Okay verse that could be work into something, thanks 8)
-
THE COLOURS OF LIFE
God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?
I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!
The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.
My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate
As I DREW for Nostradamus
King Henry lost an eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is surely nigh.
Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.
The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.
My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in Your dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Hi Jackdaw,
So very different but so interesting to read. Poetic and historical. I would have preferred to have noticed all the artistic references without them being obvious in Capitals but that is just my way of thinking. More artistic to leave it to the reader, perhaps?
I wonder what style you have in mind for the music?
Very enjoyable and thought-provoking. Like it so thankyou ...
Marrianna :-)
Greetings Marrianna.
I am kind of useless with melodies/music.
My love is that of words.
But if I were attempt to put this into Song I would want it to be bob dylanesque by a kinda mary hopkin with guitar and backing fiddle.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
To Oldbutyet
As for Kings of Lyrics?
I myself could never compete with the likes of. . . Bob Dylan, Al Stewart or an enigma called Nick Drake?
Jackdaw1888 :-)
We don't write to compete Jack, really good write you have here I've enjoy getting into it 8)
I'm getting back into a flow at the moment so if you're okay with the little changes i made to your lyrics i might be able to JUST put melody and vocal to YOUR lyrics, if not okay, thanks for the read Jack 8)
THE HAND OF FATE
God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR his earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?
I have sat with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED as their Kingdoms Fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
I even made STATUES of 'em all!!!
My BRUSHROKES tells Your story
I PENCIL in Your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are my FRIENDS
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate
The Colours of Life was then Black and White
Their offspring were shades of Grey
For I am the 'Hand of Fate'
I still paint things in my own way.
I DRANK with Nostradamus
King Henry lost his eye
We WORTE a book together
POTRAYING Doom when we where HIGH.
Knights Templars' then Crusade
I even DREW the Masons in
I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes from their SINS.
My BRUSHROKES tells Your story
I PENCIL in Your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are my FRIENDS
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate
The Colours of Life was then Black and White
Their offspring were shades of Grey
For I am the 'Hand of Fate'
I still paint things in my own way.
My BRUSHROKES tells Your story
I PENCIL in Your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are my FRIENDS
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
To Oldbutyet
As for Kings of Lyrics?
I myself could never compete with the likes of. . . Bob Dylan, Al Stewart or an enigma called Nick Drake?
Jackdaw1888 :-)
We don't write to compete Jack, really good write you have here I've enjoy getting into it 8)
I'm getting back into a flow at the moment so if you're okay with the little changes i made to your lyrics i might be able to JUST put melody and vocal to YOUR lyrics, if not okay, thanks for the read Jack 8)
THE HAND OF FATE
God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR his earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?
I have sat with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED as their Kingdoms Fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
I even made STATUES of 'em all!!!
My BRUSHROKES tells Your story
I PENCIL in Your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are my FRIENDS
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate
The Colours of Life was then Black and White
Their offspring were shades of Grey
For I am the 'Hand of Fate'
I still paint things in my own way.
I DRANK with Nostradamus
King Henry lost his eye
We WORTE a book together
POTRAYING Doom when we where HIGH.
Knights Templars' then Crusade
I even DREW the Masons in
I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes from their SINS.
My BRUSHROKES tells Your story
I PENCIL in Your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are my FRIENDS
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate
The Colours of Life was then Black and White
Their offspring were shades of Grey
For I am the 'Hand of Fate'
I still paint things in my own way.
My BRUSHROKES tells Your story
I PENCIL in Your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are my FRIENDS
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Many many thanks for your input.
Your comments are very much appreciated.
However, at the mo I am looking at this piece as a kind of unfinished piece of Art if that makes any sense? - my true passion being Art/Painting and Sketching etc etc.
I am at prez composing a couple of verses to add to it as I think it needs more.
Maybe a Columbus?
Maybe a Rasputin?
Not to sure yet what to do!!!
Take care
Have a nice day
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Ps...
If I were to change the colours verse it would be...
Colours of life are black n white
Their offspring shades of grey
But I am hand of fate
So i'll paint things my own way...
A bit fast and racey tones/beat
If you get my drift?
PPs...
I love your thoughts upon Nostadamus!
But here's my initial thoughts...
As I drank with Nostradmus
King Henry lost an eye
So we WROTE a book together
Saying Doom was on the nigh.
-
No problem Jack, going by what you have here im looking forward to reading more and hopefully hearing and seeing your art work, keep enjoying and thanks again 8)
-
No problem Jack, going by what you have here im looking forward to reading more and hopefully hearing and seeing your art work, keep enjoying and thanks again 8)
I really really would appreciate your help.
I only have an ear for music.
And nothing else!!!
I.E. ... I cannot play or sing
Buy apparently I am kinda ok with words and research etc etc
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
No problem Jack, going by what you have here im looking forward to reading more and hopefully hearing and seeing your art work, keep enjoying and thanks again 8)
Rasputin and Columbus now added :-)
Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
To each and every one of You.
I would just like to say a big Thankyou for accepting me to your Forum and allowing me to express myself and my love of word.
The truth is...
My Dad past away this morn.
Maybe by the Hand of Fate.
RIP Michael
-
I am so sorry for your loss! :'(
I am glad you are finding the forum beneficial. I have always--since I became active here--found this community to be very accepting and supportive.
Sincerely,
Vicki
-
Very sorry for your loss Jack :(
-
I am so sorry for your loss! :'(
I am glad you are finding the forum beneficial. I have always--since I became active here--found this community to be very accepting and supportive.
Sincerely,
Vicki
Thankyou Vicki.
I just had to express my emotions somewhere...
even if it be a stranger?
Jack :-)
-
Very sorry for your loss Jack :(
Many thanks Darren.
Jack :-)
-
I wrote a Poem many moons ago.
It is entitled the 'Colours of Life'
The ode is now the "inspiration" behind the song ...
'The Hand of Fate'
Jackdaw1888 :-)
And obviously my icon come poet...
mister Bob Dylan!!!
-
This needs more work me thinks :-)
I agree.
This can be a great lyric, and it's still just a good lyric. Here is specifically how I think it "needs more work" in my humble opinion.
It has a wonderful array of magnificent word pictures which don't quite come together and create a "flow of ideas from beginning to middle to end." I think that you need to do some work figuring out exactly what story you want to tell, and/or what emotion you want to evoke.
THEN. . . I think you need to do some "addition by subtraction." Delete everything that doesn't directly pertain to the story you want to tell, and/or the emotion you want to evoke. Write a "topic sentence" that says exactly what you want to tell us. . . then get rid of (or change) everything that doesn't directly support that topic sentence. The topic sentence can be about mood or about story.
Your lyric currently has "too much good stuff" in my opinion. That doesn't mean you discard some of it. It just means write TWO songs, not just one.
This can be incredible. But it needs to become "tightly cohesive" to do so.
Good luck. And I'm really looking forward to seeing this finished.
-
This needs more work me thinks :-)
I agree.
This can be a great lyric, and it's still just a good lyric. Here is specifically how I think it "needs more work" in my humble opinion.
It has a wonderful array of magnificent word pictures which don't quite come together and create a "flow of ideas from beginning to middle to end." I think that you need to do some work figuring out exactly what story you want to tell, and/or what emotion you want to evoke.
THEN. . . I think you need to do some "addition by subtraction." Delete everything that doesn't directly pertain to the story you want to tell, and/or the emotion you want to evoke. Write a "topic sentence" that says exactly what you want to tell us. . . then get rid of (or change) everything that doesn't directly support that topic sentence. The topic sentence can be about mood or about story.
Your lyric currently has "too much good stuff" in my opinion. That doesn't mean you discard some of it. It just means write TWO songs, not just one.
This can be incredible. But it needs to become "tightly cohesive" to do so.
Good luck. And I'm really looking forward to seeing this finished.
Many thanks for your comments and advice.
I respect your humble opinion.
Fantabulous idea re 2 songs!!!
So I am going to delete one of the Verses as I appear to have 2??? and then use such lyrics in The Colours of Life song which I am about to write.
Kind Regards
Jackdaw :-)
-
This needs more work me thinks :-)
I agree.
This can be a great lyric, and it's still just a good lyric. Here is specifically how I think it "needs more work" in my humble opinion.
It has a wonderful array of magnificent word pictures which don't quite come together and create a "flow of ideas from beginning to middle to end." I think that you need to do some work figuring out exactly what story you want to tell, and/or what emotion you want to evoke.
THEN. . . I think you need to do some "addition by subtraction." Delete everything that doesn't directly pertain to the story you want to tell, and/or the emotion you want to evoke. Write a "topic sentence" that says exactly what you want to tell us. . . then get rid of (or change) everything that doesn't directly support that topic sentence. The topic sentence can be about mood or about story.
Your lyric currently has "too much good stuff" in my opinion. That doesn't mean you discard some of it. It just means write TWO songs, not just one.
This can be incredible. But it needs to become "tightly cohesive" to do so.
Good luck. And I'm really looking forward to seeing this finished.
Greetings.
I would like your opinion.
As I said the song will only have one Verse/Chorus line now.
It will be something like this...
My Brushstrokes tell your story...
Your future and your dates
Or
Your future and your fate
Or
Your Lovers and your Hates :-)
So I'll Paint things my own way
I am the Hand of Fate
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
Nearly there me thinks :-) :-) :-)
-
HI Jackdaw, what were you doing on my roof this morning? This is an excellent write, some clever wordplay, and needs few if any alterations to the original post. Methinks you can tinker too much, and before you know it, something found is lost. One line was a little awkward, i won't say which, i'm sure you know yourself, but it's hard to find fault. Sorry for your recent loss, and i'm sure i'm not alone, no strangers here, only friends.
Great stuff
Vintage54
-
HI Jackdaw, what were you doing on my roof this morning? This is an excellent write, some clever wordplay, and needs few if any alterations to the original post. Methinks you can tinker too much, and before you know it, something found is lost. One line was a little awkward, i won't say which, i'm sure you know yourself, but it's hard to find fault. Sorry for your recent loss, and i'm sure i'm not alone, no strangers here, only friends.
Great stuff
Vintage54
Arrr many thanks Vintage54
For your kind comments and compassion.
Take care
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Ps...
I was not on your roof this morn.
I was flying over the seas and sands of Time.
-
HI Jackdaw, what were you doing on my roof this morning? This is an excellent write, some clever wordplay, and needs few if any alterations to the original post. Methinks you can tinker too much, and before you know it, something found is lost. One line was a little awkward, i won't say which, i'm sure you know yourself, but it's hard to find fault. Sorry for your recent loss, and i'm sure i'm not alone, no strangers here, only friends.
Great stuff
Vintage54
And yes...
I am fully aware that my poetic words and love of rhyme and research are kinda good?
How many other submitted lyrics sent earn over 500 views and various comments within their first month???.
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
HI Jackdaw, what were you doing on my roof this morning? This is an excellent write, some clever wordplay, and needs few if any alterations to the original post. Methinks you can tinker too much, and before you know it, something found is lost. One line was a little awkward, i won't say which, i'm sure you know yourself, but it's hard to find fault. Sorry for your recent loss, and i'm sure i'm not alone, no strangers here, only friends.
Great stuff
Vintage54
Tell me which line please?
I myself have considered several.
Thanks
Jackdaw
-
Kinda of like this, it reminds me of earlier lyrics of Bob Dylan
-
Kinda of like this, it reminds me of earlier lyrics of Bob Dylan
Thankyou Rosie!
You are very astute.
Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
Kinda of like this, it reminds me of earlier lyrics of Bob Dylan
Thankyou Rosie!
You are very astute.
Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
My icon Dylan was the inspiration behind my words but the song NOSTRADAMUS by Al Stewart was the driving force :-)
-
To each and every one of You.
I would just like to say a big Thankyou for accepting me to your Forum and allowing me to express myself and my love of word.
The truth is...
My Dad past away this morn.
Maybe by the Hand of Fate.
RIP Michael
Sorry for the lost of your Dad Jack, continue writing and posting.
-
To each and every one of You.
I would just like to say a big Thankyou for accepting me to your Forum and allowing me to express myself and my love of word.
The truth is...
My Dad past away this morn.
Maybe by the Hand of Fate.
RIP Michael
Sorry for the lost of your Dad Jack, continue writing and posting.
Cheers matey.
And many thanks for your kind words and inspiration.
I do plan to carry on writing.
Whether it be a Song or a Poem or a Book?
Kind Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?
I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!
My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
All its Times n all its Dates
But I PAINT things my own way
I am the Hand of Fate
As I DREW for Nostradamus
King Henry died by eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is on the nigh.
Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.
My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
All its Times n all its Dates
But I PAINT things my own way
I am the Hand of Fate
As I wined and dined Rasputin
He was killed by a guest's gun
DEPICTED as the Mad Monk
His 'Habits' became his undone
I have sailed with Chris Columbus
And discovered the New Lands
I PENNED all maps and charts
You now have in your hands.
Your memories n histories
Will one day fade away
Your colours of life
In BLACK and WHITE
Will turn a shade of GREY.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
I kind of like my last verse.
It 'Paints' what this song and Life itself is all about.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?
I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!
My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
All its Times n all its Dates
But I PAINT things my own way
I am the Hand of Fate
As I DREW for Nostradamus
King Henry died by eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is on the nigh.
Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.
My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
All its Times n all its Dates
But I PAINT things my own way
I am the Hand of Fate
As I wined and dined Rasputin
He was killed by a guest's gun
DEPICTED as the Mad Monk
His 'Habits' became his undone
I have sailed with Chris Columbus
And discovered the New Lands
I PENNED all maps and charts
You now have in your hands.
Your memories n histories
Will one day fade away
Your colours of life
In BLACK and WHITE
Will turn a shade of GREY.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Got two more verses on the go,
Before this song's complete,
I will add them soonest
And then be Obsolete!!!
Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?
I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!
My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
All its Times n all its Dates
But I PAINT things my own way
I am the Hand of Fate
As I DREW for Nostradamus
King Henry died by eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is on the nigh.
Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.
My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
All its Times n all its Dates
But I PAINT things my own way
I am the Hand of Fate
As I wined and dined Rasputin
He was killed by a guest's gun
DEPICTED as the Mad Monk
His 'Habits' became his undone
I have sailed with Chris Columbus
And discovered the New Lands
I PENNED all maps and charts
You now have in your hands.
Your memories n histories
Will one day fade away
Your colours of life
In BLACK and WHITE
Will turn a shade of GREY.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Got two more verses on the go,
Before this song's complete,
I will add them soonest
And then be Obsolete!!!
Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Any budding Bob Dylan out there want to know the last 2 verses to this Song?
-
Still working upon this songs last 2 verses.
Sorry!!!
Regards
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
I like this.
it's quite rough and makes me want to correct it.
There are some good ideas here, and in a way it is, of course, fine the way it is.
-
I like this.
it's quite rough and makes me want to correct it.
There are some good ideas here, and in a way it is, of course, fine the way it is.
Thankyou!!!
I like it too :-)
-
Despite where I go with JAYLEEN, this song THE HAND OF FATE will always be my fave!!!
Bob Dylan remains my icon.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
Despite where I go with JAYLEEN, this song THE HAND OF FATE will always be my fave!!!
Bob Dylan remains my icon.
Jackdaw1888 :-)
Well over 1500 views and positive feedback on this Forum re my lyrics The Hand of Fate and yet still no budding aspiring musically talented person has managed to put my words to a demo/song/disc???
Jackdaw1888 :-)
-
Just saying Hi and have a Fab bank hols.
But the truth is I just wanted to see 3 of my songs come lyrics at the top of this Forum.
Many thanks SONGWRITERS for allowing me to write and to post.
THANKYOU!!!
Jackdaw 1888
-
The hand of fate has just dealt me a cruel blow.
My sister lost her fight re cancer and her brain tumour.
May the gods smile down upon her.
May the angels give her wings.
Rest in peace Patricia Anne xxx
Carl Anthony
-
I like this.
it's quite rough and makes me want to correct it.
There are some good ideas here, and in a way it is, of course, fine the way it is.
Please offer this Forum your valid thoughts and as to how you can "Correct" my lyrics???
Thankyou
Jackdaw1888
-
WITT WOO!!!
YIPPEE!!!
OMG!!!
My lyrics appear to have had 2148 Views!!!
Hmmm? That is not bad for a guy who knows NOTHING about MUSIC don't you think?
Jackdaw1888 :-)