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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Skub on May 23, 2018, 01:50:33 PM
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Yo y'all. :)
This unusual competition was an inspired choice by mister PaulAds. It was definitely a challenge,as the drums were quite...uh..'live'. :D Not like my usual mate,Mr.Logic!
Quite often I start off with a drum track and jam along to see what transpires,so this mode of operation wasn't a million miles from the way I normally operate,but because the drummer wanders a little here and there,the tracks had to be done in a complete take. Old school! :D Recording has made me very lazy.
Since it was a punky style R&R beat,the temptation was always there to make the song in a similar vein. Being the contrarian I am,I decided not to do that,just for the hell of it! ;D
I didn't bother doing any work on the drums,or the bleed from the rest of the band,I just whanged a few tracks over the top and hoped it would mask (ha!) the noise. When you listen to the drum track solo,I reckon that's about as well as most drummers hear the rest of the band anyway! ;D
The lyrics are self explanatory,dealing with folk of many faces.
Anyway,as long as I finish in front of Boydie in the comp,I'll be happy. :P :D
https://soundcloud.com/skub1955/mask/s-9ujw0
Will the real you stand up
Give me a chance
I'm tired of this dance
And making up
No matter how you rate it
It's all so complicated
And messed up
I can't take it
Knowing all the times you fake it
I can't take it
Remembering the ways you make it up
I'm chasing shadows every day
Everything that's real just fades away
You speak in words of mystery
Try to hide the history
You betray
What face is real,I can't say
You wear a different one each day
What face is real,I can't say
You wear a different one each day
I shouldn't really need to ask
Show me the face behind the mask
What face is real,I can't say
You wear a different one each day
What face is real,I can't say
You wear a different one each day
I shouldn't really need to ask
Show me the face behind the mask
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Hi Skub
that's great - particularly love the vocals (multiple takes?) all together. Makes the drum track sound so much more normal and not so wild - very clever!
Like the lyrics - and "Fake" is such a word of our times!
This was indeed an inspired idea for a competition! I'm not normally inclined to go in for them, but having the constraint of the pre-recorded drum track added an interesting challenge.
Dave
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Clever stuff Davy, This moves in a totally different dimension to the original track but boy is it effective.
The vocals are superb as usual and the double / triple track vocs lead to an almost eerie, otherworldly effect. Won't mention the guitar playing as its amazing as usual. Top job man :)
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Turn that saturation knob up to 11!
The amount of fun you had doing this shines through Mr Skub, well done indeed. And angry lyrics too, which suits the mood.
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Nice song Skub!
I like that you made it a little less punk rock. The intro works great setting a slower pace. Nice vocal effects.
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Very much enjoyed this skub! Had me shimmying around my kitchen.
I love how you've made this sound so unique, despite using the same drum track we all have. In fact I could say that for all the drum challenge tracks so far, same drums but completely different tracks.
Your vocals and guitar works are brilliant as always and very thoughtful lyrics.
Great track
All the best
Darren
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I’m loving these songs!
Another belter...this one knits right in with the drum track...took it in a different direction and it sounds ace.
Layered vocals worked a treat with a great lyric and message.
Cool as you-know-what 8)
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Hey skub
Some good tunage here - liking those guitar lines and the vox - stand out stuff.
Another great interpretation of the drum track.
Enjoyed it ;D ;D
Paul
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Loved the start - listening to it I was transferred back to the mid seventies and long haired bands with tashes and flared trousers ( not a bad place at )
Works for me really like it - think other entrants will have to go a long way to beat this
Good lyrics as well, I can imagine brotherhood of man singing something like this
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Americana vibe.......with a 'want to listen till the end' feel that keeps the interest going.
Good stuff.
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Hi Skub,
This comp is throwing out some rocking tunes.
Cool topic for the lyrics; get the vitriol out.
The layered vocals work well.
Guitars reminded me of Fleetwood Mac at times - cool vibe.
Loved the vocals at the end.
Digger
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This is really fascinating, hearing how you all bring your personalities and trademark touches to the same canvas... This one is you all over Skub, plenty of depth, some killer guitar, cool vocals... and I like the way you give the drums space sometimes, it felt like you'd reinterpreted the structure the drums suggested. Liked the power chord at the end too!
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Guitars sounding great here Davy.
Inventive use of the drum track here....doesn't sound like it's 169 miles an hour at all.
Nice intro to this. Vocal work is very well done throughout.
Love the extended outro...neatly done indeed with the repeated sections and that repeated guitar starts at 2.45....made me think of Blue Oyster Cult for some reason!
Should run well!
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Love it. Country punk. Awesome! It's so cool to see the different directions everyone went in this contest, and this is a really unique entry. Great job.
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Anyway,as long as I finish in front of Boydie in the comp,I'll be happy. :P :D
Well, I clearly hated this and I think it should come last!
I do actually really love this one - the space you have left for the drums within such a dense mix is really well done
It is so interesting hearing this interpretation and I think the Country slant works really well
The star of the show for me was the guitars - both the playing and production right up my street - great job!
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Oh yeah! Great for dancing. Works for the beledi dance, too, by the way. Which means, I suppose, all the entries will (this is my first one to review). I'll have a whole bunch of new music to dance to now. ;D
I can't analyze the things you put together. The words maybe, which I like fine, but not the music or the production. I can enjoy it though. If this is representative of all the entries, reviewing them is going to be a lot of fun!
Vicki
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Definitely fascinating how this doesn't sound so fast as some others with the same beat. Nice slow start and relaxed vocal delivery. Lots of space for those guitars too - very nice light and shade and tension building.
Really like the lyrical theme - perhaps would have liked more choruses (though I know that wasn't the way the track was designed!)
I might have started without the vocal harmonies just to have an additional element to add in later, but for sure you make a great sound all the way through.
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Eyewp Skubbers,
Always in for a treat when checking out what you've been up to.
Not sure if it's that 1-take affect but certainly feels more live, like you got the band in the studio with you jamming out, it's great!
Was wondering what to extent people would work the drums in rather than working around them, and you've smashed incorporating all that original energy and greatness. The bit of echoing vocals at 1:17 really brings out some tribal vibes - smashing vocals all over to be fair.
Nothing more to say ah, I'm a fan more than a peer here ;D
All the best,
Scott.
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Whato Skub
Haven't heard it yet, but I had the same idea, I just didn't want to go along with the punk vibe, I thought edm or reggae, I knew there wouldn't be enough time to do it justice.
Looking forward to giving your entry a listen. Good luck Man.
cpm
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some calm at last
a different tack & works great
has a nice tpetty like feel on the changes
vocals nicely weathered and almost chant like, like youve got the brothers behind you.. local christian brothers choir perhaps?
calmer maybe but swells lovely as the outro gets meaner
kind of dark glances as your vocal more intense..
lindsey buckingham be proud of that outro
fine song like the lyric
this comps worked so well..
a lesson in getting the job done in three minutess - should be a fat content warning on songs
fine work skubly
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Love the chorus (?) 'I can't take it...', shame it only crops up once...
Also love the bass, it really fits with the guitar, good production there. Not so keen on the harmonies/phaser effect on the vox but thats a small point.
Given the constraints and time frame, I'm impressed by the very coherent and interesting lyric, well done :)
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Liked the start - great sound with the guitars - I don't know what it's Called but I love the echo bouncy sound they give - it's a classic- well sung - can't find no faults - good old fashioned sound - I don't know if it's rock and roll but it's a real gem of s song 10 out 10"from me another one for my play list X