[Nige M]

Hi All...first post from me.

I wrote this catchy pop song last year and left it in my bag. Then a few weeks ago, my daughter then needed a song for a school project so we changed the lyrics and recorded it. Now it's being used in the school play and all sorts.

Original theme was about a early 20s young man who is having a great day...just because he's young and in love and maybe it doesn't get better than that!

Hope you lie it...NM

(I realise I may be in for a bit of stick based on the title but any feedback welcome. I feel a bit out of my depth as there are some great songs on here)

[nooms]

hi nm, really enjoyed this
sounds great, natural and live, unprocessed ..
bit like one of those really catchy cbeebies songs which jaded and faded as i am i always get a kick out of as theyre so uplifting...sincere happy tracks are gold dust !
finework and compliments to the chef.. and the vocalist

and welcome to the forum
its a good move and appreciated if you comment on others work on here,
that way you'll get a sincere response to your own work..
all the best,
nooms

[Schavuitje]

I agree with Nooms. Ok it's cheesy but in a good way. He hit the nail on the head saying it sounds like one of those upbeat, uplifting, happy songs
you might hear on Cbeebies. They always cheer me up too haha 
It's a cool simple song 

[cheff daniel]

very nice little song. i like that voice. great chorus and bridge. it is familiar sounding, but the way you do it makes it stand out.

gr.   Dan

[The Corsair]

Yeah, I think 'cheesy in a good way' is the right way to put it. Good and upbeat

[James Nighthawk]

Smiley harmless fun here! 

I liked the layered vocal at the end with the counterpoint melody. Counterpoints always add a flair to a song.

Thanks for sharing and welcome to the forum 

[Nige M]

Hi again and thanks for your comments.

I agree with them all...

It's a fun track and all the 9/10/11 years olds at school seem to like it.... maybe I've found my niche

Thanks again

Nige

[Boydie]

Hi Nige

This is a great little number and I can see why it is going down a storm at school!

I would offer the following:

The production and arrangement is great

The vocal is also very good indeed

I would offer the following constructive criticism...

I do think the song has fallen inbetween "Cbeebies" and "pop" but I think it would be better if you moved into one camp or the other

For me the lyrics and arrangement are too "poppy" for a Cebeebies type kiddie song BUT the melodies and delivery are too "kiddie" for a pop song

I therefore think you could potentially have 2 songs here that you could pick apart

I did enjoy listening to this and hope to hear more soon - whether poppy or kiddie 

[garner]

Hi Nige,

I thought this was so much fun ... there was a lightness/sweetness about the lyric and the vocal ... felt like a spring/early summer day ...

i especially liked the "such a perfect day" in the background toward the end of the song ... in my head i heard two part harmony on that ... I played it a couple times and sang along with the harmony I heard  ... it was higher above the melody ...

this is very cute ... i hope the children have lots of fun singing it in the play!

[Florida Mike]

Maybe 8 year old kids will rock to this , otherwise it bores me to death...and the recording is a match to the song...horrible.

[S.T.C]

It is what it is,,,,the target audience will really enjoy it...it`s a teeny bopper song done very well...

[tina m]

mike what is the matter.... your so grumpy today?!

i realy enjoyed this it made me smile
i gave up music when i had kids & went years not playing & thought id given up for good ......& then my first boy got interested in pop music as they do & i found some lyrics hed written in his room & thought it would realy be fun to make them into a song with him singing them!
& we did & recorded it & he was thrilled & i was back doing music again & have carried on ever since
so i thought this was great & making music with young kids is cool!

[joe gardner]

totally like a cbeebies tune, you should send this straight to those guys! obviously this is a cheesy poppy song, sung well may i add, by a young girl but thats what its supposed to be and its been executed to a tee! welcome to the forum and nice one!