Hi there,
I would welcome some feedback/suggestions on some work in progress...
https://soundcloud.com/negativeentropy/work-in-progress-when-the-time-is-right/s-JwCrF
Its a song about a wife, who suffers body image anxiety.. brought on by the media / advertising - rich / establishment people's greed and desire to make more money out of women's insecurity. She wants nothing more than to have a child, but it seems its not possible - until her insecurity and her infertility are healed.
The keyboard melody represents the intended vocal melody
When the Time is Right
The greedy become fat
Ripping out the heart of this young lass
(2 line rest)
When the time is right, they say
They might just be right, because
Like a broken limb you heal
Now our dream is real
Cavorting with their whores
Don’t feel, the hurt they cause
Conscience buried deep
By their desire, in their heat
When the time is right, they say
They might just be right, because
Like a broken limb you heal
And now our dream is real
Piano solo (half written)
Nothing brings more pain
When you’ve got the most to gain
Nothing brings more strife
Than the pain felt by your wife
When the time is right, they say
They might just be right, because
Like a broken limb you heal
And now our dream is real
copyright, Ben Sellars 2015