[domstone86]

Hey guys. sorry I've been away, I've been at college and working on 5 different projects with limited internet connectivity! Anyway, I made something new, made it in an aim to get it sold, but I like it, so might just make it something of my own.

I am terrible at lyrics writing, but this is a serious project, so if anybody thinks they can write something to this, let me know!

http://soundcloud.com/domstone86/alternative-pop-rock-track

Thanks =] x

[Kafla]

Dom , this is bloody fantastic

I love the instrumentation particularly the guitar which is so emotive and well played

Ironically the guitar would almost certainly make it impossible to sing anything over the top as it dominates the whole recording - so you would need to strip some of the playing out - which would be a shame as I love it 

Fantastic piece of music and recording 

[Razor]

Another one of those tracks that normally wouldn't be my bag but I end up really liking. The guitar just sails through the whole of the track and whilst it may be tricky to get a vocal to slot in there without it feeling crowded, I don't think it would be impossible. Well done.

[Dutchbeat]

Hey Domstone, that is beautiful!!!!!!
yeahhhhhhhhhhh

I think it will is very suitable for vocals, i can hear that melody going along and over there (because of the other sounds, I think i would recommend a high(probably female) voice...)

spectacular song!!! But writing lyrics is not my cup of tea, and it doesn't help that English is not my language. I hope you will find a writer via this forum. I am getting real good collaborations nowadays, via this forum, for writing lyrics mainly from Liam from Neverwas, so i hope you find a good music partner via this forum, for lyrics, but also one of the great singers of this forum may be interested

that is just one hell of a great recording you have made !!!!!!!!!!!!

[digger72]

Hi Dom,

Great sounding tune. It's got that Coldplay vibe running through it. I think a vocal can sit on it quite nicely, but as a kind of duet with the guitar lead parts. The vocal dropping at times to almost a breathy whisper as the lead lines take precedence, at others joining in harmony. The only bit I wasn't too keen on was the lead bit between 1.25-1.45 (reminded me of a piece of music from Top Gun).

Good luck with it.

Digger

[domstone86]

Thanks guys =] it's really encouraging that I'm getting something right!

Digger, the Topgun comment made me laugh, as I ended up imagining the same thing! I had another person say knock it down an octave, so I'll probably just do that.

Dutchbeat <3 means a lot. I've been hearing more good things about this one, but the duet thing is a fantastic idea.

Razor, somebody else noticed that about the guitar, and combined with what Kafla is saying, it seems like a good idea to chop it in parts, or make it subtle instead.

Thank you as always Kafla =] I just thought I'd let you know, never fret, it will be a solveable problem!

I'm not sure if somebody mentioned a duet or something or if I'm imagining it, but I may just give that a go with a female. Any offers? Lol.

[domstone86]

I took your replies on board, and continued working on this piece. Somehow, it sounds COMPLETELY different, but in my opinion thousands of times better. Don't ask what I did, I can't remember haha, but yea, here it is.

Going to thank a great lurker! Innominate

He's come up with some great vocals and a melody so you'll hear those in the final version!

http://soundcloud.com/domstone86/breaking-down-instrumental


EDIT: I rememeber what changed the sound of it, and it's wierd! Was editing, then my driver conked out on me, requiring a reboot of the keyboard and my DAW. So I rebooted, and got ready for some more sweet sweet song tlc. And realised all the levels were wrong and some of the tones were different. This was my attempt to put it all back in order haha.

[Ramshackles]

This is a grrrrreeeeeat backing track. Loads of energy and power, and all the little details - the bleeps and synth sounds that come and go are excellent.
You need to really work hard on the vocals and lyrics for this - they will always be the first thing people hear and remember, so they need to do the backing justice. No point having a great backing if the melody is a duffer!
Good luck with finishing it!

[misswhiterabbit]

Can't wait to see how a vocalist tackles this. I can't say I envy them! It will be tricky living up to such a strong backing track. I'd like to hear it with a male vocalist just for maximum contrast, but it would work well either way.

The structure evolves in a very subtle way but has a lot of movement, I easily listened to this to the end.
make a song for me.

Also good effort on the drums, nice variation, it certainly doesn't sound like a backing track - if you know what I mean!

As a violinist I often dread to hear a string part, they are often done so badly, but it sounds very playable and realistic. 

[domstone86]

Thanks both of you =] Ramshackles, you've almost tempted me to try take on the vocals myself. (Course I wouldn't release them if I could see improvement)!

Alice, nice for you to comment, I was thinking about you! You have the perfect voice for a vocal part if you would like to do it. Sweet with character. It'd be nice to see what I could do on the bit after the verse and before the chorus with that. Let me know if it's a ridiculous idea! Lol.

[Kafla]

Wow

[Jennibean]

Hey it could be good if I could hear it. I would love it if you gave the lyrics please I am deaf until I can see. Jennibean

[domstone86]

Hey Jennibean. Thank you for showing interest =] My major issue is that I don't really write lyrics anymore. I was never great at it, and it just detracts me from what I'm better at. If you end up taking a listen at any point and figure any vocals of your own, let me know and I'll see if it fits

Dom

And thanks Kafla, I like you, you're full of joyous messages lol

[misswhiterabbit]

It's very kind of you to ask, I'd be happy to do some backing vocals. Although I'm busy at work so I don't have huge amounts of time! Maybe you could get in contact with some music departments within universities? That's how I've got vocalists in the past.

[domstone86]

Yea that's one course of action I'm happy to do. Of course, I'm looking for a particular style of vocalist, I'll probably be better off looking for someone online though as I can decide if it's the right type of vocalist to use. It'll be a couple of weeks before I'm able to get anything, so you have until then if you want to do anything!

Don't get too busy to release your own stuff please lol.