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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: skogge on September 10, 2018, 08:28:14 AM
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Like a year later I am shamefully sneaking in a new song here. It is christianed Circles, a quite good abbrevation of (my/our) life. The songs been sitting half done on the harddrive for like six months but after pulling myself in the hair I am hereby kicking the song out in the open. Hope someone finds the time (even though I don´t) to give it a spin...
https://soundcloud.com/skogge/circles
All the best / skogge
Lyrics:
(him)
I will see you tomorrow
as I saw you today
A tiny tremble
and a sad smile
as you´re heading of to work
(her)
I will face you tomorrow
as I faced you yesterday
All those hours on your own here
What did you do today?
(chorus, both)
Satellites run in circles
Golden rings run in circles
Everything run in circles
for a while
As I hide I run in circles
As I try I run in circles
May I please run in circles
For a while
(him)
And only time
In time will tell
If we learned our lessons well
If we rose or if we fell
We´ve only just begun
If we rose or if we fell
We´ve only just begun
(both)
I will see you tomorrow
as I saw you today
Everyday´s a little different
But most of all it´s just the same
(chorus, him)
Satellites run in circles
Golden rings run in circles
Everything run in circles
for a while
As I hide I run in circles
As I try I run in circles
May I please run in circles
for a while (x2)
(her)
I will face you tomorrow
as I faced you yesterday
(Him) All those hours on my own here
All those hours on your own here
(Him) All those hours on my own here
What did you do today?
(Him) Oh what did I do?
(her)
I will face you tomorrow
(Him) I will see you tomorrow
as I faced you yesterday
(Him) As I saw you today
All those hours on your own here
(Him) All those hours on my own here
What did you do today?
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Nice and clear - it’s always nice to have the lyrics to follow - I think it would work better a bit mellower the drums are to loud for me would prefer them a bit quieter
Nice song though
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Thanks. Maybe the BD should be a tad lower... I guess it´s to loud in the beginning but it works better in the end where the musics louder. All these decisions :)