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Angel A - Singing The Blues collab. lyrics by JonDavies

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Martinswede

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« on: March 19, 2017, 10:54:03 AM »
Hi!

JonDavies wrote these lyrics:
http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?topic=12792.0
They spoke to me in some way and I worked a bit with them.

This is what I've made of 'em. A very sparse recording but I think it
suits the genre. Feel free to comment on my changes in the lyrics
and the song as a whole.

https://soundcloud.com/martin-jarnevi/angel-a-singing-the-blues-collab-lyrics-by-jondavies

A poem is a thousand pictures
And he paints them by the light of the moon
Living alone, reading the scripture
He lives between the pages of his wire-bound book

He's a poor boy
The water seeps through
The holes in his shoes
But he has painted this world
A sculptor of lives
He's an angel a-singing the blues

You can him him singing
Do do do dododo do do
Do do do do do
Do do do dododo do do
He's an angel a-singing the blues

He's his own six string symphony
Only accompanied his heartbeat
His melodies scatter in the breeze
Descending into a harmony

He's a poor boy
The water seeps through
The holes in his shoes
But he has painted this world
A sculptor of lives
He's an angel a-singing the blues

You can him him singing
Do do do dododo do do
Do do do do do
Do do do dododo do do
He's an angel a-singing the blues

Cheers,
- Martin

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« Reply #1 on: March 19, 2017, 02:10:33 PM »
Hi Martin.

Great job on this. I think the structure and lyrical phrasing is spot on.

My only question mark is over the "do do" bit.  I wonder whether an ooh would work better than a doo? Will be interested to see what others think.

Ed

Martinswede

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« Reply #2 on: March 19, 2017, 04:39:10 PM »
Hi!

Thanks!
I just took the do-do from the original lyrics.
Yes, aah or ooh or a mix could work as well.

Martin

Mike67

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« Reply #3 on: March 19, 2017, 07:17:37 PM »
Hi Martin, 

Big fan of your style and I love what you've done with Jon's lyric. You're an angel singing the blues for sure.

Mike