Thanks again to everyone for their feedback, very much appreciated as I really do use it to make improvements.
Hi Kev,
I took a few listens just now and a few things jumped out at me as i listened.
Nice song btw 
When you start the first verse there is also backing vocals with it. imo they don't need to be there so early on in your song. For me they got in the way of your lead vocal so i would consider removing them. You have a good voice so lets hear it i say!
Save backing vocals for the chorus if they need it would be my advice.
There is a sweeping sound in this track which again for me doesn't need to be present so either lower it or remove it to allow your vocal to cut through. The entire mix will sound cleaner also by doing this. If you do decide to drop this sweeping sound out you will notice that your mix is now sounding cleaner because your percussion can now do it's job of driving the song forward more because it doesn't have to compete with this sweeping sound.
I really enjoyed the listen Kev!
Johnny
Actually, originally I didn't have the backing vocals in the first verse, but it sounded too sparse. Maybe I'll play with modifying in some way. Also, will play around with the sweeping sound ...
I think I've said it before but I can't get away from the Peter Hammil comparison vocal-wise (sorry! though I really really like his less progressive and more melodic stuff, which this could be one of).
I think it's a strong song. Writing-wise I found myself asking "bring what back"? but that may be the idea (and I certainly wouldn't want to hear "bring her back". Bring me back maybe?). Production wise the BVs sounded a bit washy and dominant at times but that's a really small thing. (I think I missed the bongos version which may be a good thing!)
Yes, the "Bring It Back" is about bringing back a lifestyle that he misses rather than just a person. The BVs are the only vocal parts with no effects, so maybe that's the issue ... another thing to play with.
Kev, It's so tricky to know what to do, when you put your song out for all to advise/comment/critique? All you can do is to do what you think is right.
IMHO it's a huge improvement, I agree with JohnnyUK, that the phase doesn't need to be there all the time, those things have more effect(no pun intended) if used sparingly, like the bongos, they sit better way back in the mix. (just a little aside here, some things can be very low in the mix if they have their own space in the stereo, just because YOU know it's there, people think it needs to be obvious, but it doesn't, experiment with having stuff going on very low in the mix, and you might be surprised...it take courage though, especially if something was difficult to play. The effect I would be looking for is more 'It might be noticed if it wasn't there, rather than it would be noticed'
The backing vox are super.
The guitar riff might also be used more effectively if the riff is more sparingly used, the hook will be planted by the time thesong is over, I guess it's like having 'big boys don't cry' in I'm not in love going through the verse and chorus.
The 'bring it back's are much better.
There sounds like a difference in lead vox between verse and chorus?? (I'm only listening on my crummy laptop speakers) so don't take my word for it.
Hope this helps.
Good job Kev.
Hope you don't mind my comments.
cpm
Some great points and ideas, thanks. By the way, there are two "voices" one being the Narrator and the other the Subject of the song. In the absence of a co-vocalist, I deliberately tried to make them sound like different characters, if that makes sense.
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