[Jane99]

Hey I wrote this song last night and i just wanted to hear what you think about it and if i should keep going on with this song.This song isn't finished yet but it means a lot to me.I'm from Germany so excuse my terible English;)

Lyris:

You were sitting there like nothing happened
you tried to ignore the fact that nothing ever will be like it was before
When we told stories bout do you remember when
you stood up and fled from the reality
it was like speaking to a wall
but we tried it every day

it is what it is and yu can't change it
even if yu try to ignore it
face the reality
you will breakdown if you don't
face the reality

we all know it was hard
it'll take time but it's gonna be alright
we will never forget the time
There always be that pain
but when we look back now
every second was worth it

i wish i could turn the time back (but)
it is what it is and you can't change it
even if you try to ignore it
face the reality
you will breakdown if you don't
face the reality

[Kevin j]

I think you need to take a look at the structure of the song again,
the lyrics themselves are good but its hard to tell what kind of structure
 the song has. I think you should label each part, like, verse chorus, etc.
The lyrics are nice, so just fininsh it now 

Hope this helps 

kevin

[benjo]

hey jane99

i agree with above some nice lyrics
but look to your structure and you'll see a big difference
don't worry bout your english mine isn't to good
keep writing take care...

[ShinyThang]

Awww! I really wanted to say different to above but sorry, I agree. Potentially very good but soooo hard to score. Keep going.

And I'm originally from Luton so English isn't easy for me either