Welcome to the forum. Nice introduction to your work! I know I like it when my brain starts saying things like, "Oh, I want to sing this!" I have no nits with this one. I generally focus mainly on words and how they fit with the rhythm and melody. I don't know production, so I seldom remark on that side of songs. Your words and how they fit the music (and vice versa) all work for me. I look forward to hearing more.