[Vintage54]

                                     Dark Dark Night

                            It's a dark dark night
                            Your'e all alone
                            And your'e thinking bout some people that are gone
                            From your life
                            From your heart
                            But still on your mind
                            But don't get down
                            Don't despair
                            I'm sure there's someone out there
                            With a heart like yours
                            That one day
                            You will find

                            And in this life
                            It would be
                            Such a crime
                            If you didn't get back
                            The love youv'e given
                            In your time

                            If things were different
                            And i was free
                            At the station
                            That's where i'd be
                            Waiting on the next train
                            That would take me
                            Back to you
                            What you lose on the roundabouts
                            If that saying is true
                            Then the swings
                            They should favour you
                            And your guardian angel
                            He starts doing
                            What he's supposed to do

                            And all the love
                            That like a flag
                            You've unfurled
                            Will be repaid
                            If there's any justice
                            In this world

                            Sometimes the fog
                            Can take a while to lift
                            And hope can die
                            On the graveyard shift
                            Waiting for
                            The sleeping sun
                            To come around again
                            Your eyes are too bright
                            To be looking so sad
                            Your heart too good
                            To be feeling so bad
                            Just give it time
                            It will all come right
                            In the end

                            And though right now
                            Below the hills
                            Is where you are
                            You will rise again
                            And steal the light
                            From the morning star

                           It's a dark dark night
                           Your'e all alone
                           And your'e thinking bout some people that are gone
                           From your life
                           From your heart
                           But still on your mind.
     

[Paulski]

Hi Vintage
Had to read this one a few times - I think it's a "grower" with those far rhymes.
I like how it wraps back on itself at the end.
TBH - I didn't care for this line:

And your'e thinking bout some people that are gone

I guess "some people" sounded too impersonal?
But overall a nice flow - could be really special with the right music.
Paul

[Neil C]

Vintage, some great lines in here. In particular lines one with 'guardian angels' , 'graveyard shift' and 'morning star' took my fancy. Fab.
Interesting A,B,A,B,A,B,B structure and lyrically without repeating chorus.
 
Neil

[Nellie]

Hi! That is a lovely song. You really know how to write some great lines, nice job! I imagine it as a slow one, which makes those emotions, that you have so nicely evoked, stand out even more. The chorus is always different, but always great. As I said, very well done, I can't wait to hear this with music.

[Hugozhor]

Hi Vintage,

really great song and lyric. Interesting rhyme and only 2x chorus.

It seems more as a poem than a song.

Anyway, great one.

Cheers

Hugo