Hi everyone,
I'm in the process of recording a new song that I originally had lots of confidence in. However, it's been a few days since I last worked on it, and I just can't seem to get it right - I like the song itself, but somehow I just feel like it sounds wrong. I just can't get it to be like I want it to, if that makes sense... I was planning to add more instrumentation (midi synth or something, etc.), and master it better, but I figured I'll try to upload it here first to hear what you guys have to say. I'm not happy with my vocals; I just can't get it right (
) !!
https://soundcloud.com/empyreantic/empty-eyed-rough-demo/s-KPrOhDoes this song have potential? What would you change? I'd love to get some input/thoughts/suggestions/opinions
Lyrics:
VerseOverflow the canvas like the sun that unwrapped our day
Bright as your curious eyes where we lay
A piercing stare between the two-of-us deep within
I couldn’t hold my gaze, I turned my head, I looked away
ChorusBut when all is said and done
And your love for me is gone
Look at me and tell me I’m no-one
Cause I thought that I knew what was real, what was true
On the inside I’ll never really know
VerseNeglect our passions and remove the timely good
A cyclic love between us that I’ve never understood
I’ve tried, I’ve tried, I’ve tried, you know I really tried my best
But I’m only a shell, a mirror image, it’s no good
Bridge I’m empty eyed
of love
of love
of a love that is beyond you
of a love that is beyond me
of a love that is beyond what any of us can feel
VersePaint the canvas with the colours of the sky that night
Blank like tears in your empty eye(s)
Bridge 2
ChorusBut when all is said and done
And your love for me is gone
Look at me and tell me I’m no-one
Cause I thought that I knew what was real, what was true
But on the inside I’ll always be alone
And empty eyed
Thanks a tonne, and have a great weekend