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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Works in Progress => Topic started by: jonlint on September 29, 2017, 07:35:28 AM
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Hi all,
Working on a song idea. Its a cryptic song, I know. Feedback welcome.
https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/ghost-of-your-past
GHOST OF YOUR PAST
(Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton)
It’s the same apparition
Coming back
To warn of the future
With a flashback
It, spooks, and, scares, you
It, knows, just, how, to
Exploit, your, weakness
And, your, help…, less…, ness
You, can’t, escape, from
The ghost of your past
Like a phantom limb
The ghost of your past
The ghost of your past
The ghost of your past
Now a big storm is formin’
In your mind
The past has escaped you
Can’t be confined
You, should, have, lis…, tened
Your, doom’s, now, chris…, tened
Ign…, nored, your, weak…, ness
Now, you, are, help…, less
You, can’t, escape, from
The ghost of your past
Like a phantom limb
The ghost of your past
The ghost of your past
The ghost of your past
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Loving the guitars, certainly had my toes tapping. Interesting lyrics.
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Sounds great! Got a nice kick to it which I love. I also find the lyrics fascinating, you know ''Like a phantom limb, The ghost of your past''. It's quite poetic but also cryptic at the same time so I can interpret the song in different ways. Which is great! Well done! :)
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I like this song, sounds complete except for some mixing issues
one specific issue - the cymbals sound is almost non-existent in the singing parts - were they EQed out or recorded this way?
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I love guitars and bass.
Your voice is very good too.But i would add some background vocals.. ( But im adding them at every my song so dont be afraid :D )