Yo Jack,welcome along man.
I like the dreamy,melancholy aspect to the song.
I agree with some of the comments already posted,the prime one being the guitar needs to be more behind the vox in the mix.
For a song of this length I would like to hear some additional instrumentation,it does cry out for a step up after a couple of minutes.
You have a good voice,so be confident and stick it in our faces so we can fully appreciate. Carrying a song with attitude is a great way to demand folk listen.
Much enjoyed the song Jack,keep it coming.