Hi guys i'm after some feedback on this new song that i've finished writing this morning. It's a bit more rock n roll for me than usual. It's a first demo and I wanted to share so I can get some advice as I develop the song, the recording isn't perfect and the vocals are well, very off let's just say. I'm after your thoughts on the song and maybe some help with the melody if at all possible please. Thank you.
Lyrics
Verse 1
Wipe my feet on your dreams
And everywhere you've been
I'm here to let you know
I ain't buying your show
Bridge
Cos i'm on my knees
Lookin like you won't believe
Chorus
Do you believe in me?
Like I believe in you?
Are you keeping on
With everything that feels so wrong
Holding on for far too long
Verse 2
You wipe your feet on my dreams
And everywhere i've been
You're here to let me know
You ain't buying my show
Bridge/Chorus