Hi, Fhaos
Thanks for checking it out.
By "squashed" you mean lines too long?
Lyrically I wanted to write differently from what I usually do (to use ABBA)
So in the 1st verse was: A.B/B.A.C
2nd verse: A.B.B.C
I think that is what u mean.
Other songwriters mention that the verses should be equal. Is that always the rule, what's your opinion?
It's about thinking that one is better than everyone else, and labeling others(painting faces uneven) ,
which paradoxically gives you the worst label.
I'm a human I need to stay awake : I do that thing unconsciously, so I have to be aware(everyone does
And feeling pain is very liberating, and being aware = feeling pain, not running away.
This is based on personal life events, big and small that happened one after the other
in a short period of time.
That is my biggest problem - writing a song, that resonates with others.
I guess I plunged to deep into metaphors, making it to much misunderstanding?
Melodically I really like the bridge, and chorus melody.
Maybe I should rewrite verses later, and at the same time the bridge,
to change the verse structure and melody but maintain the bridge melody,
which can be hard
Thank you, Fhaos!, while answering, I actually got an idea how to make it more understandable and relatable, maybe will rewrite, I need some more opinions.