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Title: Just Enough
Post by: RealKevM on January 25, 2018, 04:14:20 PM

Here's another song called Just Enough. My voice is a work in progress lol. Please let me know what you think
https://soundcloud.com/realkevm2/justenoughstudio

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: pnb on January 26, 2018, 06:12:51 AM

Hi there!

Thanks for posting.

I understand your voice is a WIP but it’s holds it together enough for me to get a sense of the melody. With the right vocalist, or indeed after some coaching practice, the melody will sit much better.

I found the verse to be too dependent on a straight 4/4 beat. (Ie accenting the crotchets). For me, this took some of the energy away from the song. The rest of it flowed much better.

Chord pattern is nice and your writing comes across as authentic.

It was a pleasure to listen to

Thanks.

PNB

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: RealKevM on January 26, 2018, 07:54:04 AM

Thanks pnb, I really appreciative your comments, thank you :)

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: Viva La Stereo on January 28, 2018, 02:08:49 PM

This is good, it's raw and your personality shines from it. The song itself I love, the melody is very nice and the lyrics compliment it brilliantly. I think if you recorded the guitar and vocals seperately and mixed them it would be even better, but that's just my personal opinion and you can do what you like with it. Strangely your voice has a Johnny Thunders vibe. It really works.

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: RealKevM on January 28, 2018, 03:47:55 PM

Thanks! That's really encouraging I really appreciate you taking the time to listen and to let me know your thoughts. My voice is what lets me down really but your comments have given me a bit of a boost :)

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: Bankie on January 28, 2018, 11:09:35 PM

Even though your voice wasn't hitting the right notes properly and I found it difficult to work out what you were aiming for, it's still pretty catchy. A strong vocal would certainly have helped bring out the potential of this.

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: RealKevM on January 29, 2018, 07:02:04 AM

Cheers

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: irwin on January 30, 2018, 07:04:35 AM

You played the guitar well I like the intro chords.This song has potential I encourage You keep doing what you're doing

If you do a full Production of this song, you'll see how good a song you have.

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: RealKevM on January 31, 2018, 02:23:52 PM

Thank you sir :)

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: RealKevM on June 02, 2019, 03:49:41 PM

I've developed the song a bit further and after noticing a very similar chord structure to Prince 'When Doves Cry' i've added a bit of that to the end for a bit of fun. Here's a live version from last weekend :)

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: diademgrove on June 02, 2019, 10:17:12 PM

I enjoyed listening to your song. Shame about the chatter as I didn't catch all the words. Do you still consider it a work in progress? It sounds pretty complete to me.

Keith

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: Sterix on June 03, 2019, 12:19:55 AM

Track seems to have been moved/deleted.

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: RealKevM on June 04, 2019, 11:26:56 AM

Quote from: diademgrove on June 02, 2019, 10:17:12 PM

I enjoyed listening to your song. Shame about the chatter as I didn't catch all the words. Do you still consider it a work in progress? It sounds pretty complete to me.

Keith

Hi Keith, it's definitely finished now and i'm really happy with it. Thanks for checking out !

Title: Re: Just Enough
Post by: RealKevM on June 04, 2019, 11:27:38 AM

Quote from: Sterix on June 03, 2019, 12:19:55 AM

Track seems to have been moved/deleted.

Hi sorry mate, the soundcloud link in the original post is gone, the one i've recently posted (youtube) is the one i'm after feedback on :)