Ok, this is the first song i have ever written and am looking to get some opinions and adivce on the lyrics i have.
Back Story- I have been suffering with mental health issues for over 3 years now. I have been diagnosed with Borderline Personality Disorder and Paranoid Schizophrenia. Self-harm and suicide attempts have been a big part of this. This song is about the fight against those urges and the desire to be free from them.
Just to give people an idea of how it will sound, i wrote this with the intention of being a metal song though i don't really have anything else to offer except the lyrics.
Verse 1A fight that i keep hidden,
I battle all alone, no sign of hope.
Wounds that mean nothing to anyone,
Scars i'm ashamed to show
Pre-Chorus 1People think I'm stuck in a hole,
But I'm just trapped within myself.
Can I be rescued from this internal cell?
ChorusI beg the voice of reason,
Save me from my mental treason,
Help me fight this demon
And earn my inner freedom
Help me fight!
Verse 2My thoughts are never clear
They turn drak with ease, painful mind, it hurts.
I cut my skin, watch myself bleed,
It's my solace, the only way i turn
Pre-Chorus 2An overdose to numb the grief
But I'm still trapped within myself
Is there an escape from this internal cell?
ChorusI beg the voice of reason,
Save me from my mental treason
Help me fight this demon,
And earn my inner freedom
Help me fight!
Middle 8And when it becomes to much,
When I'm fragile to the touch,
Mental hell breaks loose and consumes me
I need to carry on in my fight to be free
ChorusI beg the voice of reason,
Save me from my mental treason
Help me fight this demon
And earn my inner freedom
Help me fight!
Help me fight!
I won't die tonight!
Help me fight!
Thank you for reading