this is a new song i wrote, im not finished it yet, there is still a few things to do , like maybe change the verses, im not completly happy with them, could you guys give my some constructive criticizm? maybe tell me what you would change in the song? thanks
V
how can i forgive, if i can't forget,
cant kiss your lips, i'll just taste regret,
more of the truth, less of the lies,
maybe then, you could look me in the eye,
(riff)
C
oh, a mistakes been made
you've broke, the ground we laid
but, you can't take it back
this choice i cant make,
This feeling i cant shake
but you cant take it back
i cant decide
V2
how am i meant to choose,
i cant win either way i lose,
but i know how i should pick,
but that decision just wont stick,
V3
should i give you a second chance,
after this are you worth another glance,
maybe not but my heart cant understand,
i wish this choice was in Gods's hands,
B
you call my name
bounces round my head
off my pain
(off the words you said)1st
(leaves me worse than dead)2nd (x2)
Chorus x2
Outro
oh please, take this choice away,
oh please, let fate decide the way,(X2)
thanks for reading