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@RealKevM - This old chap, is another brilliant song, I'm so impressed with your work, It is deep yes, but solo acoustic guitar and lone voice have a great impact if the song is deep.
I rather like the last line of the chorus, implies a desparate situation.
Kev, I've noticed that you like to establish your songs with a decent intro, why not steam straight in by singiing right from the first note, hit the audience right in the heart/eyes, make em listen.
The 2nd verse could work with a quieter, choked strumming, this'll bring some texture to the arrangment.
Very clever lyrics.
You have a brilliant lyricist's mind.
Hope this helps Special K.
Regards
Rich