[imscared]

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[CaliaMoko]

I won't be able to help with things like genre identification; I'm better with lyrics (in my opinion, anyway ). I'm short on time but I did notice one bit that might be improved. If I'm reading what you wrote correctly.

Right at the beginning:
I crave your presence i crave your touch
your still picture is never enough

I suggest you consider
crave your presence i crave your touch
your photograph is never enough

The reason is for purposes of smooth phrasing. It may depend on the construction of the melody, though, so consider that.

Hope that is helpful.

[Viscount Cramer & His Orchestra]

Bit hard to evaluate without the vocal in place to show where everything's going to fit in. I'd knock up those chorus lyrics and get a vocal done....you'll get better feedback that way.

A suggestion following on from Vicki's. What about 'just your picture is not enough'

Also found the line 'but after all our veins are still blue' sounds a bit iffy....just bunged in there to get the rhyme....sure you can think of something better!

All sounds fine so far but I'm sure you'll get better feedback once the vocal's done.

Welcome to the forum by the way.