[S.T.C]

Just wrote this after listening to Streets of Philadelphia..

it`s not meant to be a proper song..as in verse,chorus etc...so don`t point it out.it`s dark and gritty,,,

Might work on it a bit more and give it ago on my next free day..Tuesday i think

leaning against....
a blood red wall
the stain of brick dust,
the smell of the street
reflections of faces
in pools of rain water
a girl looks right through you
like the kiss of a daughter

it`s all or nothing
in this city scape
the love that i lain
the innocent raped
dark is the shadow
that no longers falls
in the corners and alleys
and cars half parked

more like abandoned
to the peoples surprise
the keys in the gutters
cold stare in the eyes
of passers by to shy to talk
they hurry along
across the parks and walkways
of steel ..rough to the feel

angels hide behind spires
watch us closely, full of desire
smoke from the factories
blackens dark skies
say all your goodbyes
say all your whens and whys
who cares when you die


ain`t no ending i care to see
what will be ....will be
take a look inside me
there ain't no angels heart.

[Kevin j]

its a great start, i dont see anything that i would change, you just need to write some kind of short hook for it, id say about two lines long, would be long enough, though it really depends what kind of stype your writinng in, if you wanted i thijk this could even work well as a rap, but i dont hink thats what you want.... im looking forward to tuesday

[BooBoo]

This really is dark. In a good way. If you can have that. Hmm

Anyway, great song, as always!! Love it.

[Allan]

I read it through once and I liked it straight away, and then on reading it again and again it was a bit like how you can watch a great movie several times and get a little something else out of it each time, I really got into your imagery there is so much to draw from it that you had me hooked. I would love to hear it.

[S.T.C]

I read it through once and I liked it straight away, and then on reading it again and again it was a bit like how you can watch a great movie several times and get a little something else out of it each time, I really got into your imagery there is so much to draw from it that you had me hooked. I would love to hear it.

Thanks for that..it`s a real pick me up..i can tell you

I would like to do it.but i don`t see how i can in the style they were intended,,,i do think it needs tweaking a little though,,,

Maybe i should be writing film noir!!

[Dutchbeat]

excellent

to me, but hey I am Dutch

but really great lyrics, i think

[Saeed AlSuri]