Hi Irwin,
These are some changes mainly in the layout of your lyrics and maybe to go with a Reggae rhythm.
I hope this may be of help but don't worry if not .. I don't mind
When I Got Home (From Work)
v1
She opened the door
When I got home
When I got home from work
Oh, oh, oh
Didn’t want to talk
Saw that smile on her face
Just wanted to be
Wrapped up in my warm embrace
(Chorus optional here)
v2
There ain’t any way
I would believe
Anything she’d say
Oh, oh, oh
Said what you’re doing
Wasting your life away
She said writing, dreaming
I’ll be a millionaire
Chorus
But she don’t wanna talk
Talk about our problems
For many years we’ve tried
But haven’t solved them yet
v3
I opened the door
When she got home
When she got home from work
Oh, oh, oh, oh
Wearing working clothes
Greeted each other with a kiss
I’m working nights
And she’s on a day - ay shift
Bridge
To make ends meet .. She got a job in the Fall
Our life’s not what it’s meant to be .. She talked about it all
Chorus and end
But we don’t wanna talk,
Talk about our problems
Many years we’ve tried
But haven’t solved them yet
We knew all along, when we got home from work
We’d be in each other’s arms
And we don’t wanna talk, we don’t wanna talk ..
When we got home from work ..
End .. No time to fight,
We need to do what’s right …
When we got home from work
We'd still be .. in each other's arms
Maybe you will want to add or change lines etc but hope this can help you.
With Best Wishes
Marrianna
and sorry for the delay. I had some catching up to do.
The delay was long, sorry about that. I'll get to the song right away.
I like the way you have edited my song lyric and would love to hear your version of the song (melody). It would be interesting to hear the part ( Oh, oh, oh, oh) and the 4 line Bridge after the 3rd verse.
I Thought I should post this version of my first lay out of this song lyric. Please read below:
When I Got Home
© 2015 Irwin Abrigo
(1st verse)
She open the door when I got home from work
Saw that smile on her face
Didn't want to talk
Just wanna be wrapped up in my warm embrace
(Chorus)
She don't want to talk about our problems
Many years we've try but hadn't solve them
She knew
all along
When I got home from work
She will be in my arms
(2nd verse)
I would believe her anything ways
I'm a dreamer that's what she'd say
Wasting your life Away
I'm Writing dreaming I will be a millionaire
(Chorus)
She don't want to talk about our problems
Many years we've try but hadn't solve them
She knew
all along
When I got home from work
She will be in my arms
(bridge)
To make ends meet
She got a job in the fall
Our life’s not the way it suppose to be
She talked about it all
We have no time to fight
So we had decided
We have to do what's right
Not to talk about it
Anymore, no
-
(Verse 3)
I open the door when she got home from work
Greeted each other with a kiss
Have on my working clothes
I'm working night she's working on a day shift
(Chorus)
We don't want to talk about our problems
Many years we've try but hadn't solve them
We knew
all along
When we got home from work
We will be in each other arms
When we got home from work
We will be in each other arms