[fischermans]

Hello all
After being absent for a while because very less time and my second hobby (carnivorous plants) which need a lot of time in this part of the year I´m back again and start with a new song. I hope I´m still welcome and will try to listen to your songs and make a few reviews this evening. Missed it really.
https://soundcloud.com/a-fisch-1/dark-side-of-a-moon-band-juli
"final band version"

Versions I did before
https://soundcloud.com/a-fisch-1/dark-side-of-a-moon-29-4
a version with bass played from Mr Saeed AlSuri. Thank you very much for that.
https://soundcloud.com/a-fisch-1/dark-side-of-a-moon-saeed
and here the same version a bit modified
https://soundcloud.com/a-fisch-1/dark-side-of-a-moon-bass
1) With the wind
the mill wheel is whispering
with the wind
all dreams are blown away
with the wind
you´ll fly to the end
but don´t be afraid
because
I will be there
Refrain: I feel a bit
like the dark side of a moon
so I go out into my honeymoon saloon
I drink to much
every day
every night
to reach the land
where milk and honey flowing
to reach the land
where angels, peace and love are sowing
to reach the land
which has no
end
2) No one knows
the right way to heaven
no one knows
how long it takes
no one knows
what difference it makes
please my darling
hold my heart
and hold me tight
Refrain: I feel a bit ....
3) The grass shines green
in the sun
life has something
off an senseless run
without an aim
way to fast
but you
will never
be the last
Refrain: I feel a bit ....
Thanks for listening.
Alexander

[digger72]

Hi Alexander,

Good to hear from you again.
I liked the guitar. The horn/synth was a little too loud for me - seemed almost up with the vocal. Perhaps set back a little it would have a more mournful tone, which would fit with the vocal and lyrics.
The lyrics suggest a lost soul - as does your delivery. Which I like.

Nice one. Welcome back.

Digger

[Saeed AlSuri]

Hello Fish ..

(carnivorous plants) ..insects eaters .. wow .. some hobby .. any way the song is great liked the intro .. and the guitar play .. the song is good .. but the synth sound  I think swap it for harmonica .. it sounds like it though .. 

so you have a honeymoon saloon you goto to get drunk .. is it real ?? with that name ?


great song man ..

Cheers ..

[Dutchbeat]

that is super cool, Fishermans, totally different for you again

really liked that! I can hear that songwriting virus all over

impressive song, liked the pauzes, but think that horn sound could be bit softer or more distant

and a very basic deep bass line would really give this the body it deserves

nice piece!

and i am sure i am allowed to say this (as my accent is terrible), i really like to hear a foreign accent in the vocals on this forum

[montydog]

Lovely guitar playing - is that a Gibson J200? Gorgeous vocals as well. I think it may be your accent but this reminds me of something from the Weimar Republic period in Germany - maybe a song from a musical set in that era. I agree that the keyboard sound is a bit hard and artificial - harmonica or strings might be better but the part itself is great.

One of the most original songs I've heard on here for a long time...beautiful.

[fischermans]

Hello and thank you for the nice words.
@digger 72
Thank you for the warm welcome. With the horn/synth you may right.I should turn it down.
@Saeed AlSur
Yes insect eaters.The honeymoon saloon is my creaton.
@Dutchbeat
Thank you very much.With the bass line there is the problem that I can not do it because never had a bass in hand.If there is someone want to do this I´m willing to send him the spur.
@montydog
Thank you for writing this compliments. I try to get better and better.The guitar is a Gibson J300. A fantastic sounding guitar.Excellent from you to hear that it´s a Gibson.
Thanks and regards Alexander

[Saeed AlSuri]

hi Fish ..

I'll do the bass if you want .. send me the track and the tempo .. and of course the chords .. instead of me guessing ..

Cheers man ..

[S.T.C]

I really like this,and love the horn,an inspired choice of instrument.........

[fischermans]

Hello
@Saeed You have a mail.
@ all I will post the result.
@ songsthatcry Thank you very much.You have an email because the summer song competition.
Alexander

[blazas]

Congratulations!!!
 This is  a great ballad,with a lot of pleasent suprises ,that dont leave it to be boring as many other . The guitar playing also is wonderfull.

[benjo]

hey well,

what a lovely piece well sung
harmonica really nice tony...

[fischermans]

Hello
@blazas
Thank you for your friendly words.
@benjo
Thank you and with the harmonica I will give it a chance but there is no harmonica in garage band and I don´t know how I can add one.
Regards Alexander

[Rhysian]

Not much that I can add that hasn't already been said.  Really like it.  Good work.

Rhysian

[fischermans]

Hello
@Rhysian
Thank you for your feedback.
@ all
Just added a version with bass played from Mr Saeed AlSuri. Many thanks to him for that.Here is the link.Thank you for listening.
https://soundcloud.com/a-fisch-1/dark-side-of-a-moon-bass
Alexander

[Saeed AlSuri]

Hello Alex ..

Did you hear my mix I've sent you ??   

The bass in your mix is to metallic .. sound like a guitar ..  .. any way if you wonted like that .. it's you jounce .. and it sounds like i'm playing with pick .. I don't use pick with bass .. 

Cheers ..