[GTB]

Departure from my usual style. I have recorded this with sole acoustic (nylon) and will post soon. It's a slow one, preferably for a woman to sing. Any feedback from the girls very welcome, as I tried to write this from your PoV.


Somewhere To Go

We booked our favourite table where we first said 'I love you', yesterday
I could tell there was something say
Our waiter made us welcome, he smiled and then he looked away
When I asked how was business today

I try to reach you, do you receive
My voice drifting by like Tumbleweed

Chorus
Where are you, there is no reply
Where is my friend and confidant
Why do I see a cloud in the sky
Why is there a tear in my eye

Only wanting coffee, sorry for the loss of appetite
Nothing on the menu took the eye
I pushed my food around my plate, my mind was numb, my mouth went dry
Then I heard the word, 'goodbye'

I could not reach you in my hour of need
No shoulder to cry on, my heart began to bleed

Chorus
Where were you, still no reply
Where was my friend and confidant
Why did you leave me high and dry
Why did you leave me to cry

Bridge
As I fastened my seatbelt, through the tears and rain
Who was rushing by my window
They'd already turned away when I called out your name
Was it someone I thought I used to know
Someone with somewhere to go
Was it someone I thought I used to know
Someone with somewhere to go

Don't worry about a thing, I won't need to pay
No sign of our waiter so I hurried on my way

Chorus
Where were you, why was there no reply
Where was my friend and confidant
Why did you leave me high and dry
Why did you leave me to cry

Was it someone I thought I used to know
Someone with somewhere to go

[Paulski]

Hey GTB!

Nice to see you posting a lyric - it's been a while!
This is a great break-up song. Not an easy subject without getting all depressing. But you nailed it here - this has a ring of regret, mutual understanding, and acceptance to it that connects the reader to the couple right from the outset. Sorry I can't give you a female POV but as far as suggs - maybe the title could appear earlier and for me the chorus would have more impact if it was always the same lyrically, or at least the first two choruses were the same.

But these are small potato niggles.
Nice one!
Paul

[GTB]

Thanks Paul, thanks for the feedback. I've tried to make the 1st chorus slightly different to leave a bit more ambiguity early on, the picking of the chords should emphasise this too, hopefully. Actually, messing around with the chorus is getting a habit with me lately, I need to control it

[benjo]

 HEY GTB


  you say you've recorded this and want a female pov
  hope you don't have to make to many changes on this

  i do agree with paulski on the chorus witch i love the rolling sound of it
  so i think it should be made the most of and used throughout the song
  there are some really good lines in the lyric

  i look forward to hearing this

  this just rolls off the tongue

  WAS IT SOMEONE I THOUGHT I USED TO KNOW
  SOMEONE WITH SOMEWHERE TO GO

           good luck on this bud

 
 

[GTB]

Thanks Benjo, I can see what you and Paul are getting at with the chorus. I'll try the 1st two choruses the same and just change the last one. I might even repeat that last one now
It'll be two weeks before I can post it though, rules is rules
G

[Bleedin Boy]

I'm sorry I can't give you a female's perspective-I just don't have the ovaries. However, I can tell you I like the line why did you leave me to cry. I like the double where and double why in the chorus also, it gives it a good flow.

[GTB]

Thanks for commenting BB, most appreciated.
GTB