[Soul Punk]

I once posted this with alot of other songs..
Would like you to have a read on its own
thanks

Tattoo Shop

I ain't got no six figure job
I ain't got no university degree
I'm not so proud of who I am
And I don't know who the hell I'm gonna be

We used to talk down at the tattoo shop
about our troubles and all our sins
Artwork spread across our young skin
Just to remind us of who we were
When we grow up someday

Down at the job centre treatin me like scum
I'd love a paying job but their ain't none
I'm sorry mister for bein a member of the working class
Come and knock on my door when you get a chance

We used to talk down at the tattoo shop
about our troubles and all our sins
Artwork spread across our young skin
Just to remind us of who we were
When we grow up someday

I got Hope and Fear written on my arm
To fight away my own demons
trying to do me harm
Put that blind up its way too dark in here
I don't wanna see the light mum cause the future aint clear

We used to talk down at the tattoo shop
about our troubles and all our sins
Artwork spread across our young skin
Just to remind us of who we were
When we grow up someday

[Paul]

Great lyrics, to be very proud of!

Best,

Paul

[Soul Punk]

Thanks Paul!

Anything in particular you liked??
or disliked??

your inputs much appreciated
TCA

[Paul]

Hi,

I liked this because I feel sure that many people will be able to relate to the ideas that you have conveyed.  "I'm not so proud of who I am and I don't know who the he'll I'm gonna be." This reminds me of a song that I wrote in 1993, " I have a photograph, a picture of a boy, I don't remember who he was. I can't imagine who he'll be." I'd say it's good, because it speaks to people, I've felt this way and written about it and I'm sure many others have too. If you can speak to people through your writing, so that they recognize themselves or their situation, then you're on the right track. People feel that they don't belong for many reasons and it can weigh heavily on them. Your song gets to the heart of what it feels like to yearn to belong or fit in! This desire to be valued is what drives many writers to continue expressing some of their deepest thoughts and it is certainly the reason that I write. Often though, I'd simply like to get on with living and enjoying life!

A thoroughly thought provoking story!
Well done,
Paul

[tone]

What he said! ^^

It has energy because it speaks in the first person about something we can all relate to. What can I offer as a criticism? If I was being picky, I'd say it has room for improvement, but I also think 'better is the enemy of good' is a phrase that has enormous value in the creative field. Just keep writing, and your voice will grow stronger, and your lyrics more compelling. You already have a head-start at a young age, so run with it!