[Peppermint]

Hey everyone,

I wrote this tonight,
It's about an old guy who's had enough of life and wants to die.
Depressing song I know but hopefully it's okay.

Peppermint

Waiting For Death to Come

V1
I try to dance,
But my bones are much too weak,
Guess my life has reached it's peak,
Yeah, it's time to admit defeat.
V2
Now I need help to cross the street,
And I need help so that I can eat,
Now theirs only one guy left for me to meet.
And his name certainly isn't Pete.
PC
And now that I am old and grey,
I'm asking death will you come my way,
Today or tomorrow wouldn't be too soon,
Cause I'm ready for my impending doom.
C
I will be,
flying through the clouds,
When my life is taken,
flying through the clouds,
I'm on my way to heaven.....
But that day is still yet to come.

oh I will be,
flying through the clouds,
When my life is taken,
flying through the clouds,
I'm on my way to heaven.....
But that day is still yet to come.
B
How much longer do I have to wait,
Oh Come on death come and seal my fate,
Show me heaven's golden iron gate,  
Cause my life is filled with all this hate.

Outro
I've had my life yeah I've had my fun.
But things have to end after they've begun.
Yeah I've had my life and I've had my fun.
And I know my life is done........

[Paulski]

Hi Peppermint

Not sure I can relate to this lyric - this guy seems to be "invented" if you know what I mean.
But maybe there are people out there that think like this. A couple of things that didn't make sense to me were - "his name isn't Pete" - I thought religious people all think that Saint Peter is the guy who operates the gates of heaven - or do I have that wrong? I also don't get why he is full of hate.

Sorry if this sounds negative - I think the chorus is really strong - just couldn't get drawn in to the character - probably just me!
Paul

[Peppermint]

Hi Peppermint

Not sure I can relate to this lyric - this guy seems to be "invented" if you know what I mean.
But maybe there are people out there that think like this. A couple of things that didn't make sense to me were - "his name isn't Pete" - I thought religious people all think that Saint Peter is the guy who operates the gates of heaven - or do I have that wrong? I also don't get why he is full of hate.

Sorry if this sounds negative - I think the chorus is really strong - just couldn't get drawn in to the character - probably just me!
Paul

Hello paulski,

Thanks for the review
Glad you like the chorus, I've had it lying around for sometime and just couldn't get round to fitting it into any of my songs.

I was trying to write a song about an old guy who's had enough of his life who is unable to do the things he use to ie eat,walk across the street etc

And that's whats making him feel he's better off dead.
Looks like I made a mistake on that pete's line lol shows how religious I am

Tbh the verses were written after the chorus and the verses seems to have suffered because of this.

Anyway At least it gives me plenty to work with.

Thanks
Peppermint

[Paulski]

Hi again
Just a thought - maybe if you made the guy happy with his life but looking forward to heaven it would work better. I think it is him feeling sorry for himself and full of hate that makes me not sympathize or relate...
Paul

[GTB]

Hi peppermint, I have to agree with Paul's comments. Also, I'd say his life has passed its peak rather than reached it (1st verse). I feel a bit uncomfortable with 'impending doom' too, it could be me but that sounds like he's about to take out the whole town with him - how about meet my doom?
These are all fairly minor observations though and it's close to being a very good song.
Cheers