[igg]

Hi All,

Something recently completed...

I Dreamt

V1
I dreamt I was Summer, .....a soft rain was falling
High on the mountain, drops sparkled in trees   
Then splashing and stumbling
They plunged down the hillsides
Into the river and out to the sea

V2
I dreamt I was Autumn .... cold winds were blowing     
Swirling like fire,  my leaves blew away                                   
Their colors all spent
They faded and crumbled
Sheltering seeds that would blossom some day                 

Chorus:
Our lives are the mountains that rise from the sea               
And love is the water that moves endlessly
Rising as mist...then falling as rain
Flowing through our lives again and again
Flowing through our lives again and again

V3
I dreamt I was Winter.... deep snows all around me               
The seeds of the summer asleep in the dark         
Under the ice,
Their futures all written                                       
Waiting for springtime to quicken their spark     

V4
I dreamt I was Springtime, ...The drifts had all melted               
Revealing my body where water had run
In each tiny crevice
New life... arising
And every green bud ...shooting up to the sun

Chorus:
The stars spin in circles ,our seasons fly by           
Eyes filled with wonder,.. we gaze at the sky           
Love's the beginning and love is the end
Moving through our lives again and again
Moving through our lives again and again

igg

[CaliaMoko]

I have a few recommendations; take or leave as suits you.

V1
I dreamt I was Summer, .....a soft rain was falling
High on the mountain, drops sparkled sparkling in trees    
Then splashing and stumbling
They plunged And plunging down the hillsides
Into the river and out to the sea

V2
I dreamt I was Autumn .... cold winds were blowing      
Swirling like fire,  my leaves blew away                                  
Their Then, colors all spent,
They faded and crumbled
Sheltering seeds that would blossom some day                  

Chorus:
Our lives are the mountains that rise from the sea              
And love is the water that moves endlessly
Rising as mist...then falling as rain
Flowing through our lives again and again
Flowing through our lives again and again

V3
I dreamt I was Winter.... deep snows all around me              
The seeds of the summer asleep in the dark        
Under the ice,
Their futures all written                                      
Waiting for springtime to quicken their spark    

V4
I dreamt I was Springtime, ...The drifts had all melted                
Revealing my body where water had run
In each tiny crevice
New life... arising
And every green bud ...shooting up to the sun

Chorus:
The stars spin in circles, our the? seasons fly by            
Eyes filled with wonder, we gaze at the sky          
Love's the beginning and love is the end
Moving through our lives again and again
Moving through our lives again and again


Overall, I like the lyric. I like the rhythm implied by the cycle of the seasons. I realize these suggestions may not click with you; they're just what struck me as I read through the lyric. I'm looking forward to hearing it set to music eventually. I hope?

Vicki

[Vintage54]

    igg,
      Jesus christ i'm humbled, this is so good, i don't know what to say. One of the best lyrics i've seen on here. I may be a little drunk right now, but drunk or sober, my opinion won't change. Beautiful, and untouchable, wouldn't change a thing. Impossible to choose a standout line or verse, if someone twisted my arm, they would have to break it. You set the standard on here my friend, take a bow. I bow before you.

                           Incredible
                               Vintage54

[hardtwistmusic]

I, too wouldn't change much unless the music demanded some changes. 

I loved the concept, and (as always) you nailed the concept with the execution. 

Absolutely lovely lyric imo.

[Opal fruit]

I've yet to develop the ability to imagine music with lyrics, but I just did.  Thank you for that.

With or without the changes, its a beautiful song.

Opal

[Royston]

Hi igg

I agree with Vintage and Verlon here this is a really awesome lyric I loved it so much I read it a few times like to hear this set music would be a very good song.

Thanks for posting

Royston 

[tomcrocus]

I think you've raised the bar igg with this one,the talent on this forum
is unbelievable,i'm with Vintage,this is gorgeous and it's one of the best
set of lyrics i've read.
I absolutely love the first chorus,i love it all,
                                                             it's a big pat on the back from me,
                                                                                                             Tom.

[Peppermint]

Hi All,

Something recently completed...

I Dreamt

V1
I dreamt I was Summer, .....a soft rain was falling
High on the mountain, drops sparkled in trees   
Then splashing and stumbling
They plunged down the hillsides
Into the river and out to the sea

V2
I dreamt I was Autumn .... cold winds were blowing     
Swirling like fire,  my leaves blew away                                   
Their colors all spent
They faded and crumbled
Sheltering seeds that would blossom some day                 

Chorus:
Our lives are the mountains that rise from the sea               
And love is the water that moves endlessly
Rising as mist...then falling as rain
Flowing through our lives again and again
Flowing through our lives again and again

V3
I dreamt I was Winter.... deep snows all around me               
The seeds of the summer asleep in the dark         
Under the ice,
Their futures all written                                       
Waiting for springtime to quicken their spark     

V4
I dreamt I was Springtime, ...The drifts had all melted               
Revealing my body where water had run
In each tiny crevice
New life... arising
And every green bud ...shooting up to the sun

Chorus:
The stars spin in circles ,our seasons fly by           
Eyes filled with wonder,.. we gaze at the sky           
Love's the beginning and love is the end
Moving through our lives again and again
Moving through our lives again and again

igg

Absolutely love this igg 

[SonderRevelations]

The imagery in this is astounding.
The one thing that sticks out to me is your line "I dreamt I was springtime," personally I feel "Spring" would work better in the sense you would be keeping the nature of the song in it's scheme. Of course it is wonderful the way it is that is just my two cents on that one line.
I love the movement from Summer/Spring, there are many allegories to be revealed through just that cycle itself when referenced to life, love, happiness, making it a great song for anyone to really relate with.

Solid lyrics with a solid foundation!

[igg]

Hi,
Thanks for all the love....

Vicki - Thanks for the suggestions...but for me the past tense works a little better...

Vintage - I'm so glad that my words touched you...and it is I, who am humbled by your praise...It has so many goosebump themes that come up for me time and time again...natural cycles of death and rebirth...awe and wonder at the universe we find ourselves in...and of course love in it's infinity.....

HTM - Thanks for your kind words..

Opal - I'm so glad that it exploded into music for you....More than I could have hoped for....

Royston - It was such a pleasure writing and crafting this song....It resonates so deeply for me..

Tom - Thanks for letting me share this with you .....

Peppermint - Much gratitude and love to you...

SounderRevelations - Thanks for taking the time to read and comment....I originally used Spring but I felt the two syllables of Springtime ( like the other seasons) was a more important consideration....And indeed allegories galore...I'm glad you enjoyed it...

igg

[Paulski]

Hi igg
Lots of wonderful imagery in this and your talent for choosing words that paint a vivid picture are well on display . Personally I like more of a story song which has more forward movement although I guess you are moving through the seasons. BTW - ending with "Spring" rather than "Winter" is a bit unusual - you lose a bit of the allegory for human life doing that. The only other nit for me was the word "dreamt". I would have rather have seen "dreamed" without that hard "t" but again, just pers. preference.
Good work
Paul

[igg]

Hi Paul,

Thanks for the comments and the very kind words...I felt that summer through spring expressed more of the idea of rebirth and renewal.....which ending with winter would not really capture.....
I guess I wanted to emphasize the never ending story of how love is a renewable resource....LOL

igg