[Mutrins]

Hey guys,

I've got a song called "Killer" and would love some feedback. It's an interesting little ditty lol

Thanks so much!
Micky

https://soundcloud.com/micky-shiloah/killer-9-26-3

Lyrics:
I'm getting kind of wasted looking at you
Won't you take me up to your hotel room
We can have some fun not knowing me and you
So let's give it a run give me 4, 3, 2...
(one, one, one)
 
Now we can keep it classy if you really want to
Or we can f*ck around if you're feeling in the mood
baby sit down in this chair and let me blindfold you
Now don't you peak
I'm a freak like you
 
Didn't your mama tell you not to trust strangers?
Especially strange men who are looking at you
With a drink in their hand
This was a bad idea but it could have been worse
I'm not gonna hurt you--But I'm taking your purse
 
Chorus:
Cuz I'm not a killer
I'm just a bad bad boy
Currently unemployed
So I gotta do what I gotta do
But I'm not a killer
I just take what I need to take
And I make sure to mind my P's and Q's
I apologize and thank you
I'm not a killer
 
You're smoking a cigar walking in NoBu Malibu
I'm looking at your car dipped in that baby blue
You know that color would go perfect with my Golden Goose shoes
I'm making me a plan gimme 4,3,2
(give me one, give me one)
 
I approach with a smile "Hello sir, how are you?"
"Leave the keys in the car i'll park it safely for you"
I sense a hesitation for a second or two
But he gives me a nod and I tell him "Thank you"
 
Now didn't your daddy tell you always trust your gut?
Listen to your belly cuz it knows what's what
It's super f*cking telling
It said "bad idea", did you listen? No.
But it's ok...you can Uber home.
 
Chorus repeats

[Skub]

Yo Micky.

This,to my ears has a pretty modern feel,but I'd qualify that statement by saying,I'm pretty certain I'm the last to judge what's hot and what's not. 

The song has a pleasant groove,though it does that from start to finish. I'd have liked to hear a little break from the main theme here and there,just for balance.

[PaulAds]

A very well put together production...

The only thing i could say by way of trying to help isn't a criticism at all...i just thought the lyric was strangely confessional and a tiny bit off-putting...which might limit it's (potentially very wide) appeal.

A great piece of work, though.

[rightly]

excellent pop song
was very entertaining with clever lyrics
funny with a serious theme.
Maybe try to push it on to labels?

Allt he best of luckto you!

[Mutrins]

Yo Micky.

This,to my ears has a pretty modern feel,but I'd qualify that statement by saying,I'm pretty certain I'm the last to judge what's hot and what's not. 

The song has a pleasant groove,though it does that from start to finish. I'd have liked to hear a little break from the main theme here and there,just for balance.

Thank you for your feedback! I was thinking about putting in a little break, but didn't want to make it too long. Or I could cut the second verse in half.

Things to think about!

Thanks!
Micky

[Mutrins]

A very well put together production...

The only thing i could say by way of trying to help isn't a criticism at all...i just thought the lyric was strangely confessional and a tiny bit off-putting...which might limit it's (potentially very wide) appeal.

A great piece of work, though.

Thank you so much!! Truly appreciate it.

The lyric can come off a little weird, for sure. It's definitely not autobiographical by any means. Just a sort of fantasy situation. I think the redeeming (sort of) factor is that this guy doesn't hurt anyone. He's just a thief! lol. redeeming, huh?

[Mutrins]

excellent pop song
was very entertaining with clever lyrics
funny with a serious theme.
Maybe try to push it on to labels?

Allt he best of luckto you!

Thanks so much! Happy to hear positive feedback. Would love to push it to labels, just trying to find the best way to do that. This industry is tough!

Thanks again!
Micky

[Yodasdad]

Nice track, I really quite enjoyed this.

It does have a very current feel to it but it also reminded me of 90's Savage garden.

I kept feeling that the second 'killer' of the chorus should rise on the 'er' but that's probably just me.

Nice work.

Yodasdad

[Mutrins]

Nice track, I really quite enjoyed this.

It does have a very current feel to it but it also reminded me of 90's Savage garden.

I kept feeling that the second 'killer' of the chorus should rise on the 'er' but that's probably just me.

Nice work.

Yodasdad

Thank you so much!! Flattered by the Savage Garden comparison!

 

[Jambrains]

Great production, very contemporary sounding (but on the other hand everything made after 1985 sound modern to me :-)
Good vocals but a tad too low in the mix for my taste but apart from that the mxi sound fine. Think the first chorus did come a bit to late, for a song like this I would like to get to the point (i.e. chorus) quickly to really hammer it in.
All in all, very accomplished, respect!

[Mikey]

Nicely done track, good song and good sound, a bit modern for my taste but sounds as good as any of the similar stuff they play on the radio.

[Mutrins]

Great production, very contemporary sounding (but on the other hand everything made after 1985 sound modern to me :-)
Good vocals but a tad too low in the mix for my taste but apart from that the mxi sound fine. Think the first chorus did come a bit to late, for a song like this I would like to get to the point (i.e. chorus) quickly to really hammer it in.
All in all, very accomplished, respect!

Thank you so much, as always!

[Mutrins]

Nicely done track, good song and good sound, a bit modern for my taste but sounds as good as any of the similar stuff they play on the radio.

Thank you, Mikey!

[Paulski]

Hey that was a fun listen.
As others have said very modern sounding - is it done in a home studio - sounds pro to me. 
Great vocals - and that's 80% of the song right there.
Think it was 1 min too long and the lyrics were a little too deep for modern pop. Maybe make 'em a bit more, how can I say this politely, "airhead"? 

Nice one
Paul

[Mutrins]

Hey that was a fun listen.
As others have said very modern sounding - is it done in a home studio - sounds pro to me. 
Great vocals - and that's 80% of the song right there.
Think it was 1 min too long and the lyrics were a little too deep for modern pop. Maybe make 'em a bit more, how can I say this politely, "airhead"? 

Nice one
Paul

Thank you so much!!! This is just home studio, yup. My bedroom lol.

LOL it would seem "airhead" lyrics work better today but I'm not a fan LOL