[jackit99]

 


please , please give my mind some peace
just tell me that you are mine ,
tell me that you are mine ,please , please give my mind some peace
just tell me that you are mine ,
stop playing these games with me ,
stop thinking your far above me as karma is among us all
dont be unkind  to me - dont try and say goodbye to me ,
dont ask me why ,just stay a little while ,
give me your high love score - fix this love affair,
tell me the answers to my prayers ?
show my your diffrient layers ?
make this heart unhurt , i know what you really got inside ,
i seen through this top layer of lies,
i know that really inside you are devine

i know that you can leave your mark on me but i'll be right here waiting paintentlly
give me back your abstract art ? but only the finest love can buy...
let me remove your skirt?
let me take part in your life?
let me think this part is just the start?
but please ,please dont consider a depart, it wont be right

but please , please just tell me that you are mine
tell me those words i long to hear ,
make my life an open door.
lend me your special powers as it this gives my life more fire power
lend me that loving heart ?
you know its just what i need when im here in the dark.
can you make it all alright tonight ?
can you make it all right ?

why cant you save me from this crazy world  ?  i know you have the power right deep in your heart .
save me now ?
come back and make it allright ?

why cant you just be  nice to me ? , tell me that you are made for me .
give my mind some peace , give my life a new lease
make my life an open door,
you know you could if you loved me some more

let me remove your skirt?
let me think this is just the start ?

tell me that you are mine ,please , please give my mind some peace
just tell me that you are mine

[Sing4me88]

Hi there are some really good lines here. I could actually imagine Johnny Cash taking a bash at this one, something along the lines of Walk the line or Cocaine Blues, at least thats the vibe and melody I had when reading them (I don't know if that was your intention but it certainly seemed to work as a read!) My only concern is that there might be too much of a 'good thing' in that there are a lot of lyrics there and I don't know how you'd be able to manage them all in one song without it dragging on. The obvious caveat to that is that this is my ill-informed opinion on this song as a 'read', you'll have a melody, tempo etc in mind and will be better placed to judge this than me!

[jackit99]

Hi there are some really good lines here. I could actually imagine Johnny Cash taking a bash at this one, something along the lines of Walk the line or Cocaine Blues, at least thats the vibe and melody I had when reading them (I don't know if that was your intention but it certainly seemed to work as a read!) My only concern is that there might be too much of a 'good thing' in that there are a lot of lyrics there and I don't know how you'd be able to manage them all in one song without it dragging on. The obvious caveat to that is that this is my ill-informed opinion on this song as a 'read', you'll have a melody, tempo etc in mind and will be better placed to judge this than me!

hello yes it was johnny cash  ''solitary man '' , it could work for john lennon as you say but more for johnny cash i would of thought , i know it can be hard to imagine in just in just in lyrics,
i have wrote about 5 songs for johnny cash , its  shame he died in 2003 otherwise might have considerd singing some of my stuff