Great song!

I thought your vocals sounded a lot like Elvis Costello on this.

Piano timing seemed to drift a little towards the end and I wondered if the sax was a little flat here and there? Or it was perhaps just a little distant? Might just be my ears…

Some great chord changes. I wasn’t quite so keen on the bit where it changes time signature…it made me think of a bloke with a walking cane tucked under one arm high-kicking and theatrically wobbling his straw-boater in his other outstretched hand like Frankie Vaughan…but it was very well done, provides a cool change to keep interest levels up and will be many people’s favourite part, no doubt.

I read one of your other threads about maintaining interest by introducing and taking away different elements here and there and changing things around, etc…and I think although they are perfectly valid and generally sound advice, I think it sometimes can be slightly overwhelming. After listening to this, I wasn’t sure I remember much about the song, apart from the fact that it was really good and exceptionally well done.

A thoroughly excellent job though.

Hi

Here is a new Pop song i have done
tried to keep it clear & warm in the mix

https://soundcloud.com/subvibe-958077223/you

Thanks for taking the time to listen


subvibe

So, now I feel a bit scared to release my new song into the world. After all, my voice stands pretty bare and emotional in the room. Really hope folks appreciate it.

https://soundcloud.com/dorian-urac/you?si=76acf5b6037c404e92f255d683af8c53&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing

The lyrics are about all the creative / sensitive / neurodiverse / alternative young people out there, who do not fully match the majority of their peers. It was written in response to the struggles that the teenagers of friends of mine experience at school. Their struggle reminds me of myself at that age.

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Lyrics
You are not broken
You’re just perfect the way you are
It’s the way you were born

You are such a beautiful soul
Don’t let them bullies kill the light
For they are locked inside a box
And you my friend
You will break free

Set your doubt aside
Spread your wings and fly
The whole world is yours
If you’d only try
And when the time is right
You’re heading for the sky

You are more refined than most
Sensitive and unique
In your own right

The world is so wide
All the options are open
One day you will be ready
You will be free

Set your doubt aside
Spread your wings and fly
The whole world is yours
If you’d only try
And when the time is right
You’re heading for the sky

The path can be lonely
One day you’ll find your home
With those who understand
And you won’t feel broken
Within the collective of free minds

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Instruments
• Piano: New York lite 1926
• Pads: UVI Saturn4
• Violin: OT Sine
• String synths: Gforce sm & UVI
• Ladidada: UVI Handysound
• Guitar synth: UVI
• Bass guitar: EZbass
• Electronic drums: UVI
• Drums: AD2

Hello All,
A song I wrote about my Son at a dark time in my life. 

https://www.bandlab.com/post/2bc04e0a-eb6b-ec11-94f6-a04a5e79a6b8

I think you're singing your lyric lines to quick, follow your intro and don't have your vocal singing with your lyrics have your lyrics singing with your vocal I haven't listen to it all sorry