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Title: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: pompeyjazz on April 15, 2019, 02:48:44 PM: Here's a cheery little pop song about one of my pet hates, the media and their manipulation of the masses. Hope you enjoy :)

We can send you useless information
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Talent shows where talent isn't present
Or Ken and Barbie dancing on ice

We pump it out – You drink it in
Then next day – Well, we'll do it all again

Celebrities who peddle on the masses
With inspiration just to be like them
Barbiturates made for the social classes
By a higher ranking class of smarmy men

We pump it out – You drink it in
Then next day – Well, we'll do it all again

Take your medicine sleepy head
It's the truth you know
Hypnotised by media
Planted seeds will grow

We pump it out – You drink it in
Then next day – Well, we'll do it all again
We pump it out – You drink it in
Then next day – Well, we'll do it all again

(c) Bradley - 2019
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: MartynRich on April 15, 2019, 02:56:16 PM: Fab Manchester rock stuff thingy. Starts like Oasis, then goes VERY late sixties, eclectic mix of guitars and in all fairness, this is a buskers song - it has the quality to earn me enough on the street for a 3-course meal at the Hilton. All very well thought out John...a corker.
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: diademgrove on April 15, 2019, 03:44:48 PM: I can imagine Elvis Costello singing this. I'm not sure about the Oasis sounding lead guitar links but that's me. An enjoyable listen.

Keith
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: Andreas on April 15, 2019, 10:10:54 PM: That intro is magnificent! :) Very clever lyrics, and an easily singable chorus! Nice work @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) :)
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: shadowfax on April 16, 2019, 03:49:13 PM: Great talent for writing about...well, anything, and doing it so well, particularly liked the slow bit towards the end..good work mate,

talking about the media...
since I moved back to the UK from the Czech Republic the bias in the media (particularly the BBC) is staggering, no longer can that organization be trusted to be impartial.
if I want proper impartial news I watch the news from the Czech Republic..they are not gagged by political correctness..they report on Europe..the world and the UK without the PC enforced omissions...

best, Kevin
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: PaulyX on April 16, 2019, 09:45:34 PM: Nice uplifting track John... I miss the 90s and that lead guitar line took me straight to memories of Shed 7 / Cast etc... my kind of thing. What a superb middle 8 by the way... suddenly really soothing in the middle of the more edgy verses. Britpop-tastic.
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: rightly on April 17, 2019, 03:09:20 PM: good song Pompey. A hate from the heart.
Very perceptive.

I never could get with the oasis thing though, I think you should make a determined effort to step over that. lol.
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: pompeyjazz on April 17, 2019, 03:26:54 PM: Think I might have to change the intro guitar sound :o
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: tboswell on April 17, 2019, 04:57:57 PM: Love the lyrics, shades of @PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253) in those biting lines (ken and barbie dancing on ice, love it!).

Thought the sound was a little muddy throughout and could be cleaned up. The little string breakdown is a great touch tho.

In a minute I'm gonna get up and switch off the telly....in a minute...or two ;)
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: dinnerwithgreedo on April 17, 2019, 05:20:35 PM: Good little track this. As you have commented yourself, the intro riff needs to be changed. Just enough to know instantly remind everyone of Oasis. Like @PaulyX (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21034), i was also reminded of Shed 7.

All the comparisons aside though, this has a memorable melody in the chorus. Always good to be catchy.
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: montydog on April 19, 2019, 01:05:35 PM: Hi,

I like this. I'm totally with you on the song message and there are some great lines and a catchy hook on the chorus. I like the way you write about the current issues in society and avoid the usual song subjects. The musical setting is absolutely lovely with great detail and interest. Everything here is top notch and I enjoyed it immensely. Can't see any way to improve it - don't stop what you're doing.

M
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: MonnoDB on April 19, 2019, 07:02:44 PM: Catchy, poppy and clever.. love ‘pump it out / drink it in’ - great line.. as always I’m super impressed how you manage to ‘pump out’ (sorry!) such quality original material at your pace. Another cracker...
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: RealKevM on April 20, 2019, 09:43:28 PM: Love the intro and chord structure, the third chord caught me off guard and works wonderfully.
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: MichaelA on April 21, 2019, 12:04:39 PM: 'Talent shows where talent isn't present' - very pithy! :) Another social commentary slice of modern life from you!

Nice riffing here and pretty damn good harmonies - and I really liked that acoustic quieter interlude which contrasted so well with the rest and led into your big multi layered ending. Cool stuff!
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: Movin Flavour on April 21, 2019, 06:55:46 PM: Hi John

I'm getting the Oasis feel too....which is a good thing!

Great lyrics.. I hate reality TV too, clever talent show comment.

Excellent guitars.

Love the sound , top tune

Sandeep
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: pompeyjazz on April 28, 2019, 05:21:36 PM: @MartynRich (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20533) That damn Guitar Rig 94 Rock solo preset is rather derivative ;D Glad you liked the 60s vibe

@diademgrove (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19135) Cheers Keith - I'll take the Elvis compliment

@Younger Hills (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22101) Thank you - I was going for a singalong chorus so hopefully achieved that

@shadowfax (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20024) Cheers Kev - Interesting as you see it after living abroad for a while. It's amazing how easy it is to brainwash

@PaulyX (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21034) Ah yes, Shed 7 and Cast - Super stuff

@Rightly (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20219) I know what you mean about Oasis. They are a bit Marmite. I'm a bit on the fence as I do like some of their stuff

@tboswell (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20223) Thanks Tom - Will have a look at cleaning the mix, or maybe not as I will have moved onto the next thing ;D

@dinnerwithgreedo (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6829) I did change the guitar sound ;D

@montydog (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18653) Thanks Alan, that's quite a compliment

@MonnoDB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19820) Thanks Karen - Pun excused !

@RealKevM (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21324) Cheers Kev, much appreciated

@MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274) Thank you, I'm glad to say that I've NEVER watched any of those talent show / dancing type shows unless you count Opportunity Knocks when I was a kid !

@Movin Flavour (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20528) Cheers Sandeep - Oasis again eh !!!

Thank you all - I promise you the next one will sound nothing like Oasis ;D ;D ;D
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: rightly on April 28, 2019, 05:27:35 PM: Being from Manchester myself n about the same age as those brothers n living abroad, I was often asked for my opinion. I just didn't like their cliché antics and I eventually preferred blur.
But each to their own.
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: Sterix on June 12, 2019, 08:33:09 PM: Love the third and fourth lines of the furst verse. Cheeky but sublime.

Lovely on the ears. Like this one.
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: Skub on June 13, 2019, 02:02:49 PM: Yo pomps.

HTF did I miss this one? I see I commented on S/C,but omitted to do the same on here? Put it down to age. ::)

Anyway,this is a supremely catchy track,hooky as hell.

I watch very little tv outside of motorcycle racing and not much radio,for the reasons you outline in your song. I daresay it all has a market,it's just not for me.

A cheeky little number well executed John. 8)
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: Paulski on June 16, 2019, 03:14:18 PM: Great lyrics in this one John.
Cheery? No, more like sad but I get your point. :D
One minor nit - the chorus seems to drag a bit - maybe try it double speed? :D :D
You've added another great song to your archive IMO

Paul
Title: Re: We Pump It Out - You Drink It In
Post by: andy5544 on June 16, 2019, 04:41:55 PM: Hi , a very catchy song , i'm thinking a bit like Cast , which is a good thing , i'm a bit rusty to dare offer any kind of critique as i haven't hardley recorded or touched my guitar for a couple of years , other than to say i enjoyed it very much ,
well done .