[irwin]

Hi everyone, Please have a listen to my song for I am in need of some advice/feedback. I have the lyric for this song I'm finalizing it out before I post.

[moraamarolaloba]

Hola  @irwin

Your composition has many interesting possibilities... although there are dissonances, or it seems to me, in the tuning of the instruments that appear, among some of them... But maybe I was wrong...
The style is very particular, take advantage of your inspiration and keep experimenting but take care of the tuning between each sound.

Stay wellll

Mora

[pompeyjazz]

Hi @irwin as Mora says, your composition is certainly interesting. The dissonance is an acquired taste - You may have made it intentionally like this. Thanks for posting 

[CaliaMoko]

Hi Irwin,

As others mentioned, it is quite dissonant. Perhaps you're deliberately making a prosody statement with the dissonance? I think the beat is good and I would be very curious how you would put a lyric to this. If you did NOT want dissonance, then your instrument or instruments may need tuning. I'll be very interested to see what happens with this one.

Vicki

[Jamie]

@irwin

Hi, I am inclined to agree with the comments above, the dissonance and tuning takes away from rather than adds to the song from my perspective. Also I'm interested how a lyric would fit with this.

Good luck with it!

Cheers

jamie

[PaulyX]

Hey Irwin, it’s certainly an unconventional left-field track. The scales are unfamiliar to my ears. It reminded me a bit of when I hear something like Indonesian gamelan music... it kinda sounds ‘off’ to western ears accustomed to a certain format, but then again also sounds exotic and sort of works. I couldn’t whistle it back to you, but it sure kept my attention. Be interesting to hear it with lyrics. Keep making them Irwin, your stuff is always interesting and unique.

[irwin]

Hello Mora, pompeyjazz, Vicki, jamie, PaulyX, I read the same advice and words from each of you and so I'll say you are right, I have to take care of the tuning between each sound, and of which I am willing to do so in my further recording.

Thanks a lot for your comments/advice and inputs. I want you all to take good care of yourselves.

Irwin

[ChrisPrice]

The 'dissonance' as some of the guys have called it is just too much for me. There's some quite clever things happening here, but they just don't fit together in a way that I can grasp. Might just be me.