[rightly]

I wrote this on guitar a few months ago.
Then I put it through cubase.
I'm pleased with the result. Strangely I found it difficult to sing.

Feedback welcome 

I hope you like it.


https://soundcloud.com/rightly/jezebel



JeZeBeL


   if ever a devil was born
violent and rude, a star of the dawn
   if ever an angel fell
 it would be you, JeZeBeL

  if ever there were two eyes
to take the blue from out of the sky
 giving me heaven and hell
 in that same tune, JeZeBeL
    the one and the only
   at times it gets lonely
  soon she will know me. . . better

that's where it is, these are the parts
  this is my kiss n‘ here is my heart
   they say only time will tell
   if it is true, JeZeBeL
       I‘ll not be surprised
      if she tells me a lie
    I‘m just glad t'have met her
       the one and the only
     if she too gets lonely
     now she will know me. . . better

     if ever an angel fell
  it would be you, JeZeBeL . . . JeZeBeL


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[Skub]

Yo Rightly.

Oh man,this flicks my switch big time.

The first listen and it was straight onto a playlist,I need many more listens.

Right from the off the emotion you invest in the song hits me like a tidal wave,there is no regaining composure.

Every time I read/listen to your lyrics I feel inadequate,like I just make up random phonetic noises to fit a choon,whereas you use them to paint as an artist,which you are.

I'm through typing the trite and banal,I need to listen more.

This is special Rightly,thank you for sharing. 

[Ramshackles]

I was drawn to this cause Jezebel is the title of an iron and wine song 

Of course this is quite different...

Love the left field arrangement on this, very inventive and the lyrics are cool.
I think the tune could be stronger to keep the listeners interest...at points its almost like there is no real planned tune, just half chatted (maybe that's the intention?) and some kind of break/chorus would be good as it tends to get a bit repetitive/fatiguing towards the end

[MichaelA]

This suits your voice very well, kind of 'human' and a very human, believable take.

It's like a modern twist on an old minstrel's ballad, and the haunting instrumental elements add to the memorable melodic story. I do like the mood in this one, cool! Simple, but very effective.

[rightly]

I was drawn to this cause Jezebel is the title of an iron and wine song 

Of course this is quite different...

Love the left field arrangement on this, very inventive and the lyrics are cool.
I think the tune could be stronger to keep the listeners interest...at points its almost like there is no real planned tune, just half chatted (maybe that's the intention?) and some kind of break/chorus would be good as it tends to get a bit repetitive/fatiguing towards the end

I do like this "half chatted" for me the voice is a musical instrument and more, a lead vocal should be able to abandon the fixed melody at any time, an attentive listener will join the dots.
I did consider adding something extra in the songs arrangement but then decided otherwise as another change could too easily distract from the intention of the song.
A less is more sort of attitude.
I think the song resonates with the many people who've been in the same or a similar situation.
I'm happy with keeping the song focussed in what it is, I don't think it needs a quantity of changes.

Thanks for your consideration and taking the time to comment.
I respect your opinion even if we don't agree completely.

 

[rightly]

Yo Rightly.

Oh man,this flicks my switch big time.

The first listen and it was straight onto a playlist,I need many more listens.

Right from the off the emotion you invest in the song hits me like a tidal wave,there is no regaining composure.

Every time I read/listen to your lyrics I feel inadequate,like I just make up random phonetic noises to fit a choon,whereas you use them to paint as an artist,which you are.

I'm through typing the trite and banal,I need to listen more.

This is special Rightly,thank you for sharing. 

Thank you Skub!

There's nothing wrong with random phonetics! lol.
Really, you're being far too hard on yourself.

Yes, I'm an artist, more defined by my limitations than by my strengths, but I'm far from losing interest and only happy when challenged.

The next (new) song will poppy-rocker. I think you'll like it.

[cowparsleyman]

Whato Rightly

Nice song, you put it together well too. I can hear it was a lot of work...

Is the intro a bit long?

regards

cpm

[rightly]

Whato Rightly

Nice song, you put it together well too. I can hear it was a lot of work...

Is the intro a bit long?

regards

cpm

Thanks CPM

I don't thing the intro is too long

Others may think so.

[cowparsleyman]

That's Cool Rightly, have a great wochenende.

I want to say that I really reading your reviews.

cpm

[rightly]

That's Cool Rightly, have a great wochenende.

I want to say that I really reading your reviews.

cpm

I'm terrible at reviewing other songs. Lol.

N just for the record,
I'm an englisch Einwanderer.

Viel Spass über die Wochenende wunsche ich dir auch.

[David Christy Jones]

Vocally this reminded me a bit of early Tom Waits. The composition of it is very unique, and the closest I can think of as a comparison is Paul Simon's Insomniac Lullaby from his newest album (Stranger to Stranger).
Really loved it, it's a very understated piece. No need or pull to be overblown or huge sounding, just expertly crafted into a very pretty and multi-layered piece. Great work!

[mickyplankton]

Hi Rightly. Must confess I struggled with this on the first listen. But David's review below prompted me to listen again and I'm glad I did. It's a wonderfully crafted delicate song. Deserves repeated listens. Great work. I think your Cubase songs are really blossoming.

[cowparsleyman]

That's Cool Rightly, have a great wochenende.

I want to say that I really reading your reviews.

cpm

I'm terrible at reviewing other songs. Lol.

N just for the record,
I'm an englisch Einwanderer.

Viel Spass über die Wochenende wunsche ich dir auch.

No you're no terrible at reviews Rightly, Dann ich muss ein Deutcsche Immigrant sein.

now there's an Idee, ein Teil von ein Sprach and another bit from the other, all the way through, das wird nicht auf dem Boden hoch geht....

ho ha.

KuhPertersillieMan

[rightly]

Vocally this reminded me a bit of early Tom Waits. The composition of it is very unique, and the closest I can think of as a comparison is Paul Simon's Insomniac Lullaby from his newest album (Stranger to Stranger).
Really loved it, it's a very understated piece. No need or pull to be overblown or huge sounding, just expertly crafted into a very pretty and multi-layered piece. Great work!

I haven't heard the latest from Paul Simon. 
He does have high Expectations to live up to.

My voice has never been compared to toms before.
For some reason it was difficult to sing, not so on the guitar.
Every time I get going with a daw production I'm breaking new ground.

I'm glad you liked the song.
Thanks for the encouragement.

[rightly]

Hi Rightly. Must confess I struggled with this on the first listen. But David's review below prompted me to listen again and I'm glad I did. It's a wonderfully crafted delicate song. Deserves repeated listens. Great work. I think your Cubase songs are really blossoming.

Thanks for commenting Mickyplankton.
Daw productions offer so many possibilities, it can be confusing.
I sometimes look back and wonder how I did that.
Yes, I think I'm getting better with the daw, creatively the future looks promising.