Dear all, as English is not my first language I kindly ask for feedback on below text. I know it's difficult to fully understand from where im comming with this text - so here is a little background.
We know and here about this:
"Im socially isolated because I get stressed when between other people in the public space.
The Boat = My Life and the shortcut to get out of it is to pay the ferryman his coin "
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A river of silens
feed my life with pleasure and fear
while trapped in the comfort of darkness
I cant - believe whats up and down
oh my god I circles round and round
i'm here but nobody there to see my fear
my river build of all these tears
I row my boat against a stream of panic
I count the days before I have to leave
pulling off the nice protective curtains
to meet the outside world
get hunted and and get
oh my god how to surrive and to find my way
to get through the day
Back home and safe
protected by the curtains and the walls
busy feeding all the souls that call
my boat still waiting by the lake
the ferryman with the tender hand
have to keep waiting
to the day I'm ready sailing home
If it will help you in the review the draft song is on SoundCloud:
https://soundcloud.com/klaus-rysoe/the-boat-v7-beta